Question

英语作文帮改错误

Dear George,
Long time no see.How are you doing these days?
Next Monday I will go to the United States.I will be on Tuesday, the United States arrived at 8 p.m. local time 41.I'll go to the United States is primarily a business but also have a short sightseeing, a total of three destinations, the first stop is Seattle, meeting a client, it will take about 3 days, and then the
next station is New York, I will take part in a 2 days training headquarters, the last is Houston, I will go with you to see a the scene of the Houston rockets game, stay 1 day, and then back to Shanghai.
I will buy a phone card and contact you when to Seattle, my Chinese number will also be opening brief international roaming, in case of urgent need.
I hope we can get together while I am there.
I will give you a call when I reach Houston.
Best wishes.
Yours truly
Li Min
我的本意：
下周一我将去美国。我将在周二美国当地时间的8点41分到达。我此行去美国

主要是商务但也兼有短暂的观光，共有3个目的地，第一站是西雅图，会晤一

个客户，大约需要3天的时间，然后第二站是纽约，我将参加公司总部为期2天

的培训，最后是休斯敦，我将和你一起去看一场休斯顿火箭队的现场比赛，停

留1天，然后返回上海。
我到西雅图后会买张电话卡（phone Card ）和你联系，我的中国的号码也将

开通短暂的国际漫游，以备急用。
又改了遍，请大家瞅瞅

Answer 1

Dear George,
Long time no see. How are you doing these days?
Next Monday I will go to the United States.I will arrive at 8:41 a.m. (local time) on Tuesday, .This trip is primarily for a business as well as short-timesightseeing, As following are the three destinations, the first is Seattle, where I'll stay about 3 days, meeting some clients. then the next is New York, I will take part in a 2 days training headquarters, the last is Houston, I will go with you to see a the scene of the Houston rockets game, stay there for 1 day, and then back to Shanghai.
I will buy a phone card and contact you when in Seattle, my home number will also be opening brief international roaming, in case of urgent needs.I hope we can get together while I am there.
I will give you a call when I reach Houston.
Best wishes.
Yours truly
Li Min

追问

a 2 days training headquarters，这样用的是对？a the scene of the Houston rockets game，这个也同样对？

追答

a 2 days training headquarter
I will go with you to see the basketball games the Houston Rockets play, and
刚刚是为了抢第一，没改完

Answer 2

这篇作文太生硬了吧 给您调一下改一下吧
I am writing a letter to tell you that I will going to America next Monday and will arriving at 8:41pm on second day.For this trip,I not only mainly for busy business but also take a short sightseeing with relax. With my schedule,there are three destinations,the first trip,Seattle,meeting a clinet with 3 days,and then the next trip is New York ,I will participate in my headquarters training with 2 days. The last trip,Houston,I planned to go with you to watch the scene game of Houston rocket with one days,and then return to Shanghai.
When I went to Seattle,I will take a phone card to contract with you and my Chinese number also open the temporary international Roaming in case of emergencies.
Your respectfully,
Li Min

追问

校正下面全文，还有in case of emergencies，为啥emergencies要用复数而不是单数？

追答

这样写可以，不过我感觉开头那句long time on see 很怪，
改成 How are you getting along these days? I miss you so much.
在那个I am writing a letter 改成 I am glad to writing a letter....
哈哈 我那时是在想会出现很多问题，所以用复数。

追问

我搜索bbc发现用复数是对的?Nikki Embleton sometimes blacks out and had taught her son Oliver how to use their landline at their home in Thornely in case of emergencies.它是否their所以用复数？所以我还是应该用emergency?

追答

我是这么想的
因为以备急用，出现的可能会很多，所以我觉得用复数

追问

你的With my schedule因该是对的，我上bbc查半天 只有on schedule并且还是及时的意思，别的就是under schedule.

Answer 3

我帮你修改一下你的作文，写在下面，你看看，这个比较简单，希望可以帮你。
Dear Mr.Smith,
I'm Li Min.Due to rain,I have a cold and is sneezing and coughing.
Unfortunately,I have to go to hospital to have a checkection and injection.
I 'm begging you to approve one day leave for me tomorrow.For today's
homework ,I'll send it to Lisa . She will give it to you at tomorrow morning For tomorrow's homework ,I'll let Lisa tell me after school , I'll hand over to you personally at the day after tomorrow morning.

Yours respectfully

Li Min
最后你补的一篇基本没问题，但是请注意书信的格式，我写的这个应该格式很标准，左右对齐及署名等需要注意，应用文中格式也占一定的分数，现在记好了，对于你以后的考试等会有帮助。

Answer 4

1. 在long  time no  see  后面加上you

2. .How  are  you  doing  these  days?把how改为what

3. will  be  后面加there ,把, the United States 去掉，arrived改为arriving
   

4. I'll go to the United States is 句子的I'll go to改成I go to

5. take about 3 days改为need about
   
   

6. see a the scene of the Houston rockets game,
   把 the scene of the中的第一个the去掉

7. stay 1 day,改为Stay for 1 day
   我以为是改错题。。。。。