Question

请能帮我改一下写好的英语作文吗？不难，中学水平。谢谢！！

要求：今年暑假,你和200多名来自世界各地的高中生参加了悉尼英语夏令营活动.请根据下列提示,向《21世纪英文报》投稿,介绍这次活动.
活动安排：8月1日—8月25日
上午：8：00-11：30 上课,提高口语和听力
下午：自由活动,每星期一次去观光
晚上：听五个讲座；8月24日晚,举办英语晚会,唱歌跳舞
要求：英语交流
收获：提高了英语水平；学会了与他人交际的方法
注意：1. 开头已为你写好；
2. 词数150左右.

我写的： This summer, I took part in an English Summer Camp in Sydney.I thought it was an awesome trip I’ve never had.And we must use English there.
Its from Aug.1st to Aug.25th.In the morning,we had some classes for improve us English proficiency.In the afternoon,we had free activities.And we每星期一次去观光.In the night,we usually had 5 lectures.
At Aug.24th,we had an English party,we danced and sang there together.
In thus summer camp,I thought my English is getting better and better,and learned the method of communication with others.
I loved it there,I hope I can go there again!!
我不知道改用过去时还是现在时 请指教 谢谢！！

Answer 1

我写的： This summer, I took part in an English Summer Camp in Sydney.I thought(改为think) it was (改为is)an awesome trip I’ve never had.And we must use English there.
Its（改为It's） from Aug.1st to Aug.25th.In the morning,we had some classes for improve(改为improving) us(our) English proficiency.In the afternoon,we had free activities.And we (这样译went on a tour once a week)每星期一次去观光.In the night,we usually had 5 lectures.
At(改为On) Aug.24th,we had an English party,we danced and sang there together.
In thus(前两词改为After) summer camp,I thought(think) my English is getting better and better,and(加上I have) learned the method of communication (改为communicating)with others.
I loved it(把it改为everything) there,I hope I can go there again!!

Answer 2

This summer, I took part in an English Summer Camp in Sydney.I （think） it was an (unforgettable)（awesome令人敬畏的，你想表达的是难忘的旅行吧？） trip I’ve never had.And we must (speak) English there.
( It's) from Aug.1st to Aug.25th.In the morning,we had some (courses课程)（to）improve (our) English proficiency.In the afternoon,we had free activities.And we （went sightseeing once a week 每星期一次去观光）.In the night,we usually had 5 lectures.
（On）Aug.24th,we had an English party,we danced and sang there together.
（After this）summer camp,I （think）my English is getting better and better,and learned the method of communication with others.
I love（it去掉，直接说我爱那里）there,I hope I can go there again!!

Answer 3

This summer, I took part in an English Summer Camp in Sydney. It was an awesome trip I’ve never had and we must use English there.
It's from Aug.1st to Aug.25th.In the morning,we had some classes to improve our proficiency of English .In the afternoon,we had free activities and we went sightseeing once every week.In the night,we usually had 5 lectures.
At Aug.24th,we had an English party where we danced and sang together.
In this summer camp,I think my English is getting better and better,and I have learnt the method of communicating with others.
I love there and I hope I can go there again!!

Answer 4

This summer, I took part in an English Summer Camp in Sydney from Aug.1st to Aug.25th.I thought it was the greatest trip I’ve never had. we must speak English there.
In the morning,we had some classes for improve our English proficiency.In the afternoon,we had free-time activities.And we went sightseeing every monday.In the evening,we usually had 5 lectures .
On Aug.24th,we had an English party where we danced and sang together.
In this summer camp,I thought my English was getting better and better,and learned how to communicate with others.
I loved it ,I hope I can join it again!!