请英语大神帮忙看一下有没有语法错误,有些句子如果用的不恰当希望能帮忙改一下,谢谢!

Asissubtlydepictedinthedrawing,asmalllampisshining.Theoillampwithalovelysmileandlight... As is subtly depicted in the drawing, a small lamp is shining. The oil lamp with a lovely smile and lighten the dark surroundings. The litter light is naturally associated with love; the darkness epitomizes people who get in troubles. Therefore, when someone is exposed to drawbacks we should give them some help.
Consider Jack, my ten years old brother, who is a schoolboy and poor in Chinese course. Last term he only got 50 in Chinese course. So I decided to give him some help. In summer holidays, I teach him how to write a good competition and assistant him to deal with problems in his homework. Last week, he told me a good news. In a recent Chinese exam, he got 90! Though I only give him a litter help, he got such big success.
Accordingly,it is vital for us to derive positive implications from the thought-provoking drawing. When we help others we are also get happiness. It is important for us to show love care to people who go through a bad patch. I believe the significant way to help others is give them confidence and do our best to give them some help.
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1.Last week, he told me a piece of good news. In a recent Chinese exam, he got 90! Though I only gave him a litter help, he got such big success.
2. It is important for us to show love care to people who are going through a bad patch.
3 .I believe the significant way to help others is give them confidence and do our best to give them what they need

首先 第一句,News是不可数,所以改一下,用a piece of news 第二我帮助他是过去时,所以用gave
其次,第二第三句,总体没错,我只是照自己的感觉改了一下下~感觉你写的挺好的~!
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