Question

求Mirah的Special Death歌词的完美翻译

A terrible mistake was made
The weight would break the backs
Of ten strong horses tried to save
The castle in the fray
If you knew that i could take the pain
Inflicted at the battle
With faithful arrows you
Might get back in the saddle
But it's a special death you saved
For me, the brown-eyed daughter
Once you made it hotter
The thankless, holy praise
Is left alone. Why bother
To cast a stone in water?

就不要用网上的翻译器了..谢谢
《美国恐怖故事》里的插曲

Answer 1

我的错无法挽回
有如千斤压顶
折断了十匹健马的脊背
破落的城堡衰败倾颓
如果当初战场相会
精准利箭穿刺而过时
你知我能受住那苦痛伤悲
你许会挺身上马，衣袂翻飞
但你给了我一场死之凄美
那有着棕色眼睛的女儿啊
一旦它因你而染上灼热光华
忘恩负义也好，盛赞美誉也罢
都终归沉寂，默而不发
何必【为何】惹是生非 投石于水？

【要求完美翻译，但完美谈何容易。我自认才疏学浅，去仍愿尽力而为。英文歌词富有诗意，多处押韵，如Made save fray pain saved praise一组，hotter bother water一组，还有battle saddle一组。我做不到最好，但仍尽力保留原文的滋味，做了部分意象补充，也通过押韵使译文更加上口，节奏相对明快。】