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谁帮我看一下刚刚写的英语作文有什么问题，非常感谢！很急很急，求帮助，在线等。呜呜呜呜 Great

谁帮我看一下刚刚写的英语作文有什么问题，非常感谢！很急很急，求帮助，在线等。呜呜呜呜
Great Wall
The Great Wall of China is a series of fortifications,Especially famous is the wall built between 220–206 BC by the first Emperor of China, Qin Shi Huang.
Some people say that if you go to China ,you must go to Beijing,to see the Great Wall.
The Great Wall is very long.The Great Wall of China is called the "Ten-thousand-Ii Great Wall" in Chinese.In fact, it's more than 6000 kilometres long. It winds its way from west to east, across deserts, over mountains, through valleys till at last it reaches the sea. It is one of the wonders of the world.
The most important thing is ,All tile work was done by hand,Chinese people's hand,this is very difficult and dangerous ,so , someone say that the Great Wall was made not only of stone and earth, but of the flesh and blood of millions of men.The power of the people at that time we can't imagine, the Great Wall for us also is a great miracle now.
Today the Great Wall has become a place of interest not only to the Chinese but to people from all over the world.Many of them have come to know the famous Chinese saying: "He who does not reach the Great Wall is not a true man."

Answer 1

标点符号，时态，还有一些chinglish需要注意，除此之外，相当不错。

Great Wall
The Great Wall of China is a series of fortifications, the part built between 220–206 BC by the first Emperor of China, Qin Shi Huang, was especially well known （虽然好像明长城更有名些）.

（这是一段还是第二段？）Some people say that if you go to China, you must go to Beijing, to see the Great Wall. (or: People have all rated the Great Wall a must-see site in Beijing).
The Great Wall is very long. In Chinese, it is called "Ten-thousand-Li Wall". Because in Chinese measurement, a Li or a mile is half a kilometre, and the existing Great Wall is around 6000 kilometres long. It winds its way from west to east, across deserts, over mountains, through valleys till at last it reaches the sea. It is one of the SEVEN （世界七大奇迹之一）wonders of the world.
The most important thing is, all tile work was done by hand, Chinese （chinese people的唯一用法是中国人民，而这句话本身就是很共产的一句话，真正的中文和英文都不会这么说）hands, this was（时态一致） very difficult and dangerous, so, someone had said （时态一致） that the Great Wall was made not only of stone and earth, but of the flesh and blood of millions of men. 最后这句话我如果不会中文的话，完全读不懂，我尝试着改为We cannot imagine what it took to built such a magnificent feat, the power of the people still left us to marvel at this thousand of years old miracle.
Today, the Great Wall has become a place of interest not only to Chinese but to people from all over the world. Many of them have come to know the famous Chinese saying: "He's not a real man unless he's been to the Great Wall".

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。。。看过了

Answer 2

文章大部分跟网上我看到的一篇2012-12-11发表的博客文章“The Great Wall of China" 一样哦，有些就是在"维基" 百科的。鼓励参考多一点其它地方的文章，比如长城官网也写得不错，但不要抄袭呀如果原文不是你写的话。如果是抄袭，那就是这篇文章最大的问题。

The Great Wall of .....,especially famous...(如逗点后especially 不用大写，原句版本的wik解释i版本是full stop后）

Some people say that if you go to China ,you must go to Beijing,to see the Great Wall.(Beijing 后不用逗点)

The Great Wall is very long.The Great Wall of China is called the "Ten-thousand-Ii Great Wall" in Chinese. - The Great Wall of China 开始后，以后可以用The Great Wall 或 It, 不用再写of China. (The Great Wall is very long, It is commonly called "long wall of 10,000Li(miles)")

In fact, it's more than 6000 kilometres long. It winds its way from west to east, across deserts, over mountains, through valleys till at last it reaches the sea. It is one of the wonders of the world. - reaches 前不用加it, seven wonders of the world，其它不改了，你与网上的另一文章句子一样

The most important thing is ,All tile work was done by hand,Chinese people's hand,this is very difficult and dangerous , - 也是与上说的原文意思，但愿版本没有tile work. 那篇写All the work ha to be done by hand 写得对. tile work 不知道你指的是什么，也没有这样说的，tile work是铺地砖呀什么的。

Today the Great Wall has become a place of interest not only to the Chinese but to people from all over the world.Many of them have come to know the famous Chinese saying: "He who does not reach the Great Wall is not a true man."- 整段跟该文章一样

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嗯嗯，谢谢，确实看了好多

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