Question

跪求高手批改雅思作文~~~最好能给出分数~

题目是现在孩子善于利用高新科技，所以家里的事情都有年轻人来决定，同意还是不同意。
There is a growing trend these days that young generations have become the decision-makers in the family. Some people say that youngsters usually are able to apply advanced technologies and know more about latest science, thus, big decisions should be made by them. However, I am not a believer in the argument that important events should be decided by the young rather than the old.
Admittedly, most people hold the viewpoint that young people are often equipped with more information and knowledge because the early contact with advanced facilities like TV set, computer, and mp3. On the contrary, as the relatively few opportunities of receiving higher education and the limit of technology development, old generations are poor to adapt the latest changes as a whole. Therefore, it seems more advisable for them to be decision-makers in a modern family
Despite the poor aspects of old people, their advantages could not be neglected. The elder family members, like parents or grandparents, who have gone through life with a large number of difficulties, obviously have better experience to cope with complex affairs than younger ones. Thus, the old could make solutions with a more mature attitude. For example, when discussed some important problems in one’s life such as getting marriage and finding job and giving birth to baby, young people may not consider objectively and correctly because most of them did not have these or similar experiences. In a word, elder family members sometimes could make better decisions than the young.
To sum up, young people with advanced skills and latest information about science and technology of course are entitle to make some decisions. Nevertheless, in my view, the decisions, especially some significant ones, should be made by listening the suggestions from old generations.

Answer 1

高分词汇和句式不多，不过还算连贯整齐，段落结构还不错，而且语法错误不多，应该可以6了。不过也取决于考官的心情。也许会给5.5

Answer 2

5.63分，