Question

有一篇雅思大作文！那位高手替我看看能得多少分？

题目：In many countries schools have problems with student behaviour,explain the reason and selution.

作文：

Nowaday, there is a growing arguement about problem with student behaviour in many countries' school which influence students' academic performance negatively. In my opinion, there are several reasons why these things happen.

First and forecast, inadequate or unsuitable school rules generate problems of student behaviour. Schools are the place where students have access to formal education, so that schools have the responsibility to regulate student behaviour in order to facilitate their study. If the schools do not establish enough rules or rules can not be adaptted by most students, their behaviour may not be regulated properly and at the same time do something wrong.

In addition, teachers in school are still a primary factors for student behaviour. Teachers need to educate not only knowledge but also various characteristics to cultivate students' proper behaviour. If the teachers are not able to teach students how to control themselves with enougrh patience, it is difficult to control what they do only by restrictive rules.

Finally, students themselves are also responsible for their own behaviour. For many students are the only child in families, they lack essential self-control to regulate their behaviour. Moreover, young students are innocent and curious, so that they may not distinguish right from wrong. Due to their curiority, they will probably do something incorrect and even criminal which seriously affects their future development.

From above discussion, we can see that it is necessary to take suitable steps to solve this problem. I believe that to consititute proper school rules is undeniable. Still, students themselves need to be educated the importance of selt-discipline too.

Answer 1

这个作文40% 是6； 60%是 5， 要看当时考官的考虑了。 我建议你多写几篇task1 和2 给真正懂雅思的老师让他们给你改一下，根据“模板”改出“模板”，不知道你几月份考，如果比较临近了，建议你最少写5套，根据近月的压题写，我认识的雅思考官，他们改作文会很不同。会对你有帮助。

Answer 2

个人认为第一段有很强的模板的痕迹。而这年头，模板是很容易向下拉分的。应该不会超过6.
如果你真的想让人仔细批改的话，建议你找个专业的老师，淘宝上也可以，20元一篇，语法什么的都可以改好。

Answer 3

5分.. 看看你Task1的分数应该能拉高..
现在第一段大多都是模板好不 ..

Answer 4

看你在哪考。。

在国内的话不超过6分。。
在国外应该能到7分。。

因为你的模板痕迹太重了。。

Answer 5

能得15分、

Answer 6

6-6.5分