Question

求改英语作文。谢谢！

In 1895，UN announce that it is International Volunteers Day on 12.5 every year.
So, it is necessary for us to know what is volunteer.The volunteer is that a person do something for another who need help.Of course, we support them for free. Briefly,We should be helpful to people.
Now,we need to know something about the spirit of volunteer`s sever.First,they should have skill and willing to help people.Second,we must be honest and goodness.Last but not least the spirit is willing to pay.
In my opinion,we need to encourage more people to participate in it .One,we need to establish an organization to attract more people.Two,we need to hold an activity to tell more people the reason why we need to help some people.
Directions:
Directions: For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic On Volunteering. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 and base your composition on the following instructions (given in Chinese):
联合国在1985年宣布每年的12月5日为国际自愿服务者日(International Volunteers Day)。
请就以下问题展开阐述：
志愿者服务的精神是什么？
你认为我们需要在中国提倡和鼓励自愿服务吗？如果需要的话，我们应如何提倡和鼓励自愿服务？

Answer 1

In 1895，UN announced that it is International Volunteers Day on 12.5(12th of May or 5th of December?) every year.
So, it is necessary for us to know what is a volunteer. A volunteer is a person who does something for another who need help without reward in mind. We should be helpful to others.
Now,we need to know something about the the minset of a volunteer. First, he should have the skill and the willingness to help others. Second, he must be honest and proactive. Last but not least the spirit is willing to pay in term of monetory or time.
In my opinion,we need to encourage more people to participate in voluntory work . We can establish an organization to attract more people. We can also hold activities to tell more people about the reason why they need to help others.
I tried my best to correct your sentences but I need to change so much that I worried that I had changed all your views. Your written essay is below standard. It is so hard to correct without distorting the whole essay!!!

追问

我把作文要求写在了上边，能不能帮我详细改一下，谢谢，错的用括号标出。

追答

已改啦。

Answer 2

In 1895，UN announce that it is International Volunteers Day on 12.5 every year.
So, it is necessary for us to know what is volunteer.The volunteer is that a person do something for another who need help.Of course, we support them for free. Briefly,We should be helpful to people.
Now,we need to know something about the spirit of volunteer`s sever.First,they should have skill and willing to help people.Second,we must be honest and goodness.Last but not least the spirit is willing to pay.
In my opinion,we need to encourage more people to participate in it .One,we n