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英语高手来！急急急急急急！！！

Good afternoon.It's mypleasure to have the chance to introdce myself. My name is ZHANGJIAQIAN, 17years old. And I am from Zhuhai,which is a extremely beatiful city. I prepare to register for examination of Heritage Management. I have the work experience in the student union and have a good time in there. The interest is extensive. Especially the love of literature andhistory.The book which I have been reading is a global history.I like reading verymuch because I think the knowledge can equip myself and make me be a better person. It will be my great honor to be a student of you university,thanks for listening.

明天就要面试了，想看看这篇自我介绍有哪些错误，希望大家帮帮忙把错误挑一下，再帮忙改正。小弟跪谢了！

Answer 1

...introduce....I'm 17 years...beautiful...I'm preparing...for the examination...time there...My interests are...love for...the world histroy...like to read it...be the better...your university.

Answer 2

ZHANG JIAQIAN改成Zhang Jiaqian .
17 yearsold 不能做你名字的同位语，需要独立成句，可以单独写一个句子I am 17 years old.下一个句子里的And 改成小写和我前面给你加的句子连成一个句子。
extremely 前面的a 改成 an .
there前面的in去掉。
Especially 首字母改成小写，前加逗号。
knowledge前面的the去掉。
be最好改成become，因为强调的是动作不是状态。
最后一个逗号后面的句子单独成句。

Answer 3

a extremely–an extremely
the love of–the love for
这个我不确定对不对，但是感觉你的很别扭make me be a better person–made me a better person
如果考官和你对话，注意一下介词的使用
祝你顺利
（后面是附加的）
介绍自己就I'm ***,a 17-year-old boy/girl就可以了

Answer 4

Good afternoon.It's my pleasure to have the chance to introduce myself. My name is ZHANG JIAQIAN, 17years old. And I am from Zhuhai,which is a extremely beatiful city. I want to register for examination of Heritage Management. I have work experience in the student union and hav e a good time there. The interest is extensive, especially in literature andhistory.The b ook which I have been reading is about global history.I like reading very much because I think that kn owledge can equip myself and make me become a be tter person. It will be my great honor to be a student of you university,thanks for listening.

Answer 5

第四排：I have great interest in reading,expecially literature and history.
第五排：because I think reading can equip myself with knowledge and make me a better person.

Answer 6

have good time there 不加in 还有global history是特指一本书还是一种类型的书还是其他？个人认为你应该用the

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只有这里吗

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一条条来啊

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啊，那个书名就是这样的。。

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那特指那本书是the啊 楼下那个个人觉得make me be a better person是对的 没必要改啊 还有 第四行 prepare for 没有prepare to吧