Question

学术类雅思小作文，请教英语高手

IELTS4 TEST1 Writing Task1想表达单身家庭的贫困占比是6种家庭中最高的。The proportion of sole-parent families living in poverty was biggest in 6 types of household.Sole-parent families had the higgest poverty rate in 6 types of household.以上两句话表达正确吗？有否语法错误？欢迎大家修改，指出不足。谢谢！！！

Answer 1

重点弄错了吧。。。是要你总结global water use by sector的main features, 然后还有brazil and congo的consumption 。。 你第一句话就没指出你文章要写的全部内容。。。只说了consumption， 然后就急转直下开始介绍water use in worldwide ？ 太跳跃了吧。。。。 The graph and table above show details of the usage of global water in different field, as well as the water consumption in Brazil and Congo in 2000. Firstly, the graph displayed the global water mainly use in three aspects -- agriculture, industry and domestic, 然后写图 While the water consumption ......... Finally, 总结2图的共同点或差异点，或者对比2图得出上面结论等等...... 这样才符合外国人写文章的逻辑。。。但是要我批改你作文的话就不行了。。。我语法就算个渣渣。。。。只能给你这样的建议了。。。毕竟好几年没考过雅思了。。。但是 英语写作技能还是知道点点的。。。