Question

高三党，写了英语作文，高分求改！

我是广东考生，作文要求五句完成，并涵盖所有信息，语句连接通顺。希望有高中老师或高三同学可以为我指出我的语法错误和语句间连接问题。给我一些修改建议和要点，指出我的优点与不足。（PS：最好不要用太多超纲词汇和语法）

$*作文要求用五个句子完成*$

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Answer 1

Learn How to Share With Others
At the last weekend I had an interview with the Professor of Psychology
Kelly Lam discussing the ideas of the Chinese students on the
questions of sharing. At present, over 30% of the Chinese students don’t
like to share their happiness or sorrows with others. Actually we have failed
to let the students know the importance of sharing through education. In the
era we are now living it is very important for the youngsters to learn and
taste the feelings of sharing. Youngsters should learn how to share with
others, for this will be conducive to their future growth.

追问

写得真好，收下了。请问，我的作文里，有没有什么错误呀？

追答

写的还可以。当然，还有待于提高。