Question

写人的英语作文(高一)

老师说考试可能会考到，我作文语言不事很华丽，但语法错误不，比较平凡。GGJJ能给一篇档次高点的作文不！我是高一的，生词少一些！谢谢了啊！

Answer 1

写一个喜欢的人物形象
I have never ever imagined Severus Snape is such a true heart beholder. All that i know is he keeps on protecting Harry Potter and doesn't show his inner most feelings and that's all.But after 3 days that i finally managed to go through Harry Potter and the Deathly Hollows, my attitude towards Snape changed again...He is a MAN!

I have long hold a little respect for this Potion teacher since the very first version of Harry Potter, knowing not why there's the feeling inside me, whispering he is a good man, after all that he did to Albus Dumbledore, who broke totally and fell out of the window. The moment i read this, i felt something tight and bitter holding my throat and stomache...no...i don't believe it...it can't be Snape who killed Dumbledore...Though still hold the resentment for Snape's rough behavior, i still caught the hope that Snape would turn up and help Harry in the end, which, indeed happened, but rather calm.
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After Nagini, the snake of Voldemort's cut her poisonous fangs into Snape, i felt my stomache rolling, rather uncomfortable and disgusting, when old Snape fell blooding; However, just the very last moment, he handed Harry his truest and most beautiful, yet painful memories to Harry Potter.I cried as i read through those words---- Something more than blood was leaking from Snape.Silvery blue, neither gas or liquid, it gushed from his mouth and his ears and his eyes...

Who could have ever believed that Snape was Harry's mom's first lover? or we can say he regarded Lily Evans as his first love, but pity didn't gain the final affection from her...It's already too heartbroken to watch his beloved marry to James Potter and then die when trying to protect her son, however Snape's love over Lily was so beyong courage that he took Harry Potter under his Protego-charm, even thogh with loathe in his eyes...But that's reasonable, who would have stand the fact to protect his first lover's son while the boy is not his, but his enemy's?

Answer 2

楼上的方法不是很适合高中作文,很多中学的老师也就是一个6级水平,大量的难词甚至会被判错.
建议从3方面下手,(自己高三,作文能够拿23/25左右)
1
注意文字的切入点,高中作文区区130字是不能有太多发挥的.找一个较为新颖但是距离普通打分入口不远的点入手,然后加上严密的语法句型可以直接高人一等.
2
适当使用新词,(前提是第2.3解释的词语).可以起到润色文章的作用.同时记得控制结构,具体参考老师日常使用的经典范文.
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楼上也提及了,书写很重要,不建议写花体因为有打分的两边倒现象.(即部分老师欣赏部分老师反感的一种字体)可以写斜体就好了.意大利斜体那种.
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