Question

假如你是李华，在英国某中学参加了为期一个月的交换生交流活动。请你给该校校长Mr Black写一封电子邮件，

假如你是李华，在英国某中学参加了为期一个月的交换生交流活动。请你给该校校长Mr Black写一封电子邮件，表示感谢。内容主要包括：1．感谢帮助（包括提供的活动，赠送的礼物）；2．交流感受（了解了英国文化、提高了英语水平）；3．欢迎来访。注意：1．字数100左右；2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3．邮件开头和结尾以为你写好。Dear Mr Black,I am writing to express my thanks for…___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Best wishes.Yours sincerely,Li Hua

Answer 1

One possible version: Dear Black, I am writing to express my thanks for your kind help during my visit in England. Many thanks for all the things you have done for us. And thank you for the gift you sent me. It’s one of the best gifts I have ever got. During my stay in your country, you offered us such good opportunities to communicate with you and your students. Therefore, I have learned more about English culture and my English has improved a lot. Besides, I have made several good friends there. I am looking forward to your early visit to China so that I will show you around our country. Thank you again for your kind help. Best wishes. Yours sincerely, Li Hua

试题分析：本文是篇材料作文，材料简明扼要，学生很容易把握写作要求。考生在源旁写作之前必修认真审题，首先要注意文章的时态，要求有三条，1. 表示谢意，用thanks for 或者thank you for ... 2. 对交流的回顾和感受，要用到一般过去时或者现在完成。3. 欢迎来访。要求让你给Mr Black写信，因此本文必须用第一人称。再有就是不能根据材料逐字逐句的翻译，应该注意句子的衔接，以提高作文的档次。 【亮雹陪橡点说明】文中正确地运用了不同的时态并运用了丰富的语言。文章第一段就运用了三个定语从句，表达感谢之情，运用了不同的表示谢意的表达方式避免重复，如 thanks for ，many thanks for, thank you for, 说明作者有丰富的语言积累并恰当地运用了make good friends， looking forward to，show around , so that 从句等等,为乱塌文章增色不少。同时作者还注意了句子的衔接，如运用：And ，Therefore, Besides, 等等，提高了评分的档次。