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明天要交给外教批，占学分有点高，身边也没有英语比较好的人QAQ求帮忙修改一下语法啊拼写什么之类的，谢谢！！！
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If heroes in the world all be the same, can every hero become “Superman”or “Iron Man”? In most people’s impression, heroes are just like “Superman”,they brave and powerful and save lives. Wallenberg and Mandela are bothrecognized heroes, and both of them are fight for people’s freedom. I thinkalthough they called “hero”, except some similar, there are still somedifferences between them. Wallenberg saved a lot of people who were Jews, butMandela saved all the people in South Africa. The purpose of this essay is tocontrast the theme of heroism of Wallenberg and Mandela.
First, I’m going to discuss the heroism of Wallenberg. In thesummer of 1994, Hitler began to kill the Jews, and lots of innocent people losttheir lives. At this time, Wallenberg appeared. He gathered some friends, theycame to the train station, saved a lot of prisoners. “I made the longest jumpof my life.”——author named Tom Veres hadsaid that, and very touched my heart. Wallenberg is a really brave and cleverman, he did something that others afraid to do, and succeeded. Everyone can bea hero if you take bold steps, no matter how strong you are, no matter how manypeople save. I think this is Wallenberg’s heroism, a person is also a life, it’snot how many he save, it’s the love of life. 展开
PS，最后两段发截图QAQ字数超了······
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If heroes in the world all be the same, can every hero become “Superman”or “Iron Man”? In most people’s impression, heroes are just like “Superman”,they brave and powerful and save lives. Wallenberg and Mandela are bothrecognized heroes, and both of them are fight for people’s freedom. I thinkalthough they called “hero”, except some similar, there are still somedifferences between them. Wallenberg saved a lot of people who were Jews, butMandela saved all the people in South Africa. The purpose of this essay is tocontrast the theme of heroism of Wallenberg and Mandela.
First, I’m going to discuss the heroism of Wallenberg. In thesummer of 1994, Hitler began to kill the Jews, and lots of innocent people losttheir lives. At this time, Wallenberg appeared. He gathered some friends, theycame to the train station, saved a lot of prisoners. “I made the longest jumpof my life.”——author named Tom Veres hadsaid that, and very touched my heart. Wallenberg is a really brave and cleverman, he did something that others afraid to do, and succeeded. Everyone can bea hero if you take bold steps, no matter how strong you are, no matter how manypeople save. I think this is Wallenberg’s heroism, a person is also a life, it’snot how many he save, it’s the love of life. 展开
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第一句应该是are
第二句有语法错误 第一段的一些词与词之间没有空格
第二段第四句有语法错误He gathered some friends, theycame to the train station, saved a lot of prisoners.
Wallenberg is a really brave and cleverman, he did something that others afraid to do, and succeeded
I think this is Wallenberg’s heroism, a person is also a life, it’snot how many he save, it’s the love of life.
都是一样的错误
第三段 He stuck to...那里有错的
he was aiming too high...修改一下吧，有点看不懂
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我发现你最常见的一个语法错误就是你的一个句子，实际上往往包含了好几个句子。
第二句有语法错误 第一段的一些词与词之间没有空格
第二段第四句有语法错误He gathered some friends, theycame to the train station, saved a lot of prisoners.
Wallenberg is a really brave and cleverman, he did something that others afraid to do, and succeeded
I think this is Wallenberg’s heroism, a person is also a life, it’snot how many he save, it’s the love of life.
都是一样的错误
第三段 He stuck to...那里有错的
he was aiming too high...修改一下吧，有点看不懂
......
我发现你最常见的一个语法错误就是你的一个句子，实际上往往包含了好几个句子。
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我发现你最常见的一个语法错误就是你的一个句子，实际上往往包含了好几个句子。
就是这个，最常见也是最容易犯的。你把一些句子按照一个主语一个谓语这样排好就可以了，有关系的就用一些连接词、副词串起来就好。
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