Question

英语翻译，翻译学生们的学习成绩与自身的努力紧密相连，下面这样的翻译对吗？谢谢！

Answer 1

有些小错误。
学生们的学习成绩与自身的努力紧密相连
The students' academic achievement is closely related to their own efforts

学习成绩academic
自身self; oneself
努力effort
紧密close together; inseparable
相连be linked together; be joined

Answer 2

Students' academic performance is closely linked to the degree their efforts.
学生们的学习成绩与自身的努力紧密相连.