Question

帮忙批改英语作文

作文题目如下:
下面是你班同学对你们英语老师提出的建议。假如你叫李华，请你代表全班同学给老师写一封建议信。
1.若您的客再生动、有趣些，我们会更喜欢您。请把微笑带进课堂，您的微笑给予我们信心。
2.课上我们是师生关系，课下我们可以是朋友。
3.请多关注我们，因为我们很出色。爱学生，就会得到学生的爱。
4.请用朴实的语言教育我们，多给我们一些建议，少给一些命令。
5.学会休息，要注意保重自己的身体。
注意：1.以第一人称写； 2.词数100左右

下面是我的作文。
Dear teacher,
As your student, I would like to give you some suggestions, representing all my classmates.
If more active and interesting in your classes, we would even love you. We want to see your smile in classes; your smile will bring us confidence. Then, we hope you and us can have more different relationship in different place. In classes, you are our teacher, but out of classes, why don’t we be friends?
Then we hope you pay more attention to us, because we are excellent. Love student so that we love you.
Please talk to us with simple and honest words, give us more suggestions instead of orders.
Last, we hope you rest well, and take good care of yourself.
Best wish to you!
Yours,
Li Hua
麻烦哪位英语达人帮我修改一下，感激不尽
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Answer 1

Dear teacher,
i am with a big honor As one of your student, on behalf of all my classmates I would like to give you some suggestions. we'd love you more If there was more activity and funing in your class, We want to see your smile at our class; your smile will bring us confidence. and Then, we hope you and us can have more different relationship in different place. you are our teacher at our class, but out of class, why don’t u be friends with us?
Then we hope you pay more attention to us because we are excellent. Love your students so we love you.
Please talk to us with simple and honest words.instead of orders give us more suggestions .
finally, we hope you rest well, and take good care of yourself.

Best wishes
Li Hua

Answer 2

Dear Mrs.XXX,

On behalf of other students, I am writing to offer some suggestions in regard to your teaching. First, if you can teach in more interesting and lively way, we will like you more. We also hope you smile a lot because your smile will render us confident to our study. Secondly, although you are a teacher and we are your students, we hope after class we can act as friends instead teacher and students. Thirdly, please give more attention to us since we are all outstanding students. Your love of students will be repaid more from the love of your students. Fourthly, give us more advice and fewer commands. Practical and simple words can be more effective in education. Lastly, we sincerely hope you take care of yourself.

Yours sincerely,
XXX