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急，帮我看一下这篇英语作文有没有什么语法问题，帮我修改下，在线等

急，帮我看一下这篇英语作文有没有什么语法问题，我觉得不太对，帮我修改下，在线等
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职业选择是一个很重要的选择，可能影响你的一生。所以，一定要选择你最喜欢的或者你最擅长的职业。
对于我来说，我最喜欢的职业是企业经理，我想我最擅长的也会是这个，
但是，想当一名经理并不是那么容易的。首先，我要学习很多这方面的相关知识，一个经理必须学识广博。其次，我要学会与人交流，对于一个经理来说这是很重要的。我会努力朝这方面发展的，我要学的东西还很多。
我想我会成为一个出色的经理的。
Career choice is a very important choice , may affect your lifetime.
Occupation that you possibly are good at most therefore, must choose you liking it most.
As for me, my most delighted occupation is an enterprise manager , I think that I am expert in most also may be this。 but, wants to think that one manager is really not so easy. Relevance knowledge that first, I ask to study many this aspect, necessary learning of a manager is extensive. Secondly, I ask learn to communicate with
person , this is very important as for a manager. I am able to make
great efforts to develop towards this aspect , I ask the thing learning to return many back.
I think that I will become a
outstanding manager.

Answer 1

Career choice is very important,and may affect your lifetime.
Therefore，please make sure that the occupation you choose is the one you are good at or you like most.
As for me,the occupation i like most is an enterprise manager . I think that I will be an expert in this field. However, being a manager is really not so easy. Relevant knowledge comes first. I set down to studying as much as i can in this area, because necessary learning of a manager is extensive. Secondly, I have to learn to communicate with others ,which is also very important for a manager. I am able to make great efforts to develop it towards my goal. Admittedly, there is a long way to achieve it.
After all, I think that I will become an outstanding manager.

按照你的原文改的累死，大概就是这个样子……不光语法错误，用词问题很大……请问你什么英语水平？初中？高中？要不我帮你另写一篇吧……

Answer 2

对于我来说，我最喜欢的职业是企业经理，我想我最擅长的也会是这个，
但是，想当一名经理并不是那么容易的。首先，我要学习很多这方面的相关知识，一个经理必须学识广博。其次，我要学会与人交流，对于一个经理来说这是很重要的。我会努力朝这方面发展的，我要学的东西还很多。
我想我一定会成为一个出色的经理的。

Career choice is a very important choice , possibility affects your lifetime. Occupation that you possibly are good at most therefore, must choose you liking it most. As for me, my most delighted occupation is an enterprise manager , I think that I am expert in most also may be this, but, think that serving as one manager is really not so easy. Relevance knowledge that first, I ask to study many this aspect, necessary learning of a manager is extensive. Secondly, I ask learn to communicate with person , this is very important as for a manager. I am able to make great efforts to develop towards this aspect , I ask the thing learning to return many back. I think that I will become a outstanding manager.一

Answer 3

正确 的作文是
Career choice is a very important choice, which may affect your life. Therefore, we must choose your favorite or your best job.
For me, my favorite job is the business manager, I think I will be best at this,
However, If you want to be a manager is not so easy. First of all, I have to learn a lot of knowledge, a manager must be broad knowledge. Secondly, I would like to learn to live with people exchanges, for a manager, this is very important. I will work hard towards the development in this field, I would like to learn a lot.
I think I will become an excellent manager