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英语作文求修改

In this picture, the son is talking with his father about his concerning about the nuclear waste, but his father told him that if he can empty the dustbin here, he can do anything! The picture telling us that we have to focus on our daily life. Especially those little things might be very important ones.

In our daily life, we always listen to people who talk with each other. However they usually escape the reality. Maybe these people won't be successful. In my opinion, it is of great importance for a university student to do small things well before undertaking something big and we should aim high, but at the same time, we shall never measure a task by its size. From little things, big things grow. If we can accomplish things around our daily life well one by one, we will become better and better. No rules, no standards. So sweep your house before conquering the world.
我知道还有很多地方写的不好，求指导谢谢

Answer 1

In this picture, the son is talking with his father about （1）his concerning about the nuclear waste, but his father （2）told him that if he can empty the dustbin here, he can do anything! The picture （3）telling us that we have to focus on our daily life. （4）Especially those little things might be very important ones.

In our daily life, we （5）always （6）listen to people who talk with each other. However they usually escape the reality. Maybe these people won't be successful. In my opinion, it is of great importance for a university student to do small things well before undertaking something big （7）and we should aim high, but at the same time, we shall never measure a task by its size. From little things, big things grow. If we can accomplish things （8）around our daily life well one by one, we will become better and better. No rules, no standards. So sweep your house before conquering the world.
（1）his concerning改为his concern，concerning是介词;
(2) told him改为tells him，前后时态要一致；
（3）telling us改为tells us或is trying to tell us也可以；
（4）改为：Sometimes, those little things might be very important ones.
(5) always 改为 often
(6) listen to people who talk with each other.改为 hear people talking with each other about their great ambitions. 注意，listen to 强调的是目的性和过程性，可理解为 “听，倾听” hear 意为”听说，听到“。
(7) 此处应另起一句，and去掉，改为 We should aim high,
(8) around 改为 in。
你的作文写的不错，只是有些细小错误。第六处算是大点的问题，表达不清。
如果你是在备考四级的话？提醒你一下这是考过的题材，今年不会再考了。
如果单纯是练笔还是很不错的。

Answer 2

1. concerning > concern
2. telling us > is trying to tell us
3. daily life > daily lives
4. Especially those... > They can be very important ones, especially those little things(especially不要放在句首）
5. We always listen to people who....> We always listen to people talking with each other.
（而且这一段，聊天怎么就被看成了逃避现实？）
6. a university student > 这里·提到了一个大学生，后尾却用we，应该把它分成两句
(something big. We should aim...)
7. around our daily > in our daily

你写得很不错了
-个人意见，仅供参考-

Answer 3

In this picture, the son is talking with his father about his concerning about the nuclear waste phenomena.However, his father just told him to empty the dustbin here. The metaphor of the picture is that to reduce the waste, we have to focus on our daily life ,especially those little ones.

In our daily life, we always listen to people who talk with each other{没理解你表达的是什么？？}. However they usually ignore the reality.i thought these people won't succeed. In my opinion, it is of great importance for a university student to do small things well before undertaking something big. we should aim high, but at the same time, we shall never measure a task by its size. From little things, big things grow. If we can accomplish things around our daily life well one by one, we will become better and better. No rules, no standards. So sweep your house before conquering the world.

Answer 4

昨天不是帮你改过了吗？难道看都没看？

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看了，大家帮我改的我都在修改，这个问题提了好多天，各种研究，20分满，想高点嘿嘿