Question

求英语大神帮我看看这段翻译有没有语法错误！老师总说我缺谓语没有主谓宾什么的！必采纳！

求英语大神帮我看看这段翻译有没有语法错误！老师总说我缺谓语没有主谓宾什么的！必采纳！With the high-speed development of information technology and the rapid popularization of Internet technology, more and more traditional enterprises transform to E-commerce, however those companies only saw the advantages of electronic commerce in the operation, while ignoring the cost of electronic commerce, which makes the cost cannot be effectively controlled and it also exposed the shortness in the controlment of cost.

对应的中文如下:
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Answer 1

以下版本是改正后的，括号中是错误分析，求采纳~
With the high-speed development of information technology and the rapid popularization of Internet technology, more and more traditional enterprises transform to E-commerce.（逗号改为句号，因为是两句话，中间没有连接词） However, (首字母大写，however后面要加逗号) those companies only saw the advantages of electronic commerce in the operation, while ignoring the cost of electronic commerce, which makes the cost not （make 后面不用加 cannot be哦）effectively controlled and also exposes （and连接的前后部分主语都是which，这里不用加it，而且时态要保持一致）the shortness in the controlment of cost.