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我写了一篇英语作文，帮我修改一下行吗？ 非常感谢你！

Group Work in the English Class Everyone in his English class must be have group work. I like my group work. Because it can help me learn English better. We can save time to deal with a lot of questions. Peter and Linda are my classmates. I want to tell them some suggestions. If we think over our ideas, we will be much better. Someone in our group was in difficulty, we must try our best to help him. I do belive ‘where there's a will, there's a way.’I look forward to our English group will be more successful.

Answer 1

1。Everyone
in
his
English
class
must
have
group
work.
去掉be
不需要被动
2。I
like
my
group
work，because
it
can
help
me
learn
English
better.
because
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中间用逗号
因为前后是一句话
不是两句
3。I
am
looking
forward
that
our
English
group
would
be
more
successful.
am
looking
进行时态表示持续期盼的心情
that
之后引出的是一句完整的句子
that作为引导词引出从句
所以不用to
would委婉的说法
用来表达希望的心情
4。I
would
like
to
tell
them
some
suggestions
that
if
we
think
over
our
ideas,
we
will
be
much
better.
that
后是跟的是前面的单词suggestions的同位语从句
也就是对建议的内容说明了一下
写成一个复合句
文章比较流畅
有衔接性
5。
上下文加些适当的衔接词
不然好像是一堆句子流水账
改的也许有点难
不知道能不能理解
希望帮到你
Everyone
in
his
English
class
must
have
group
work.
I
like
my
group
work，
because
it
can
help
me
learn
English
better.And
we
can
save
time
to
deal
with
a
lot
of
questions.
I
knew
Peter
and
Linda
in
the
class,
they
are
my
classmates.
I
would
like
to
tell
them
some
suggestions
that
if
we
think
over
our
ideas,
we
will
be
much
better.
Sometimes
one
of
us
in
our
group
is
in
difficulty,
at
this
moment
we
must
try
our
best
to
help
him
or
her.
I
do
belive
‘where
there's
a
will,
there's
a
way.’I
am
looking
forward
that
our
English
group
would
be
more
successful.