Question

一篇很简单的英语作文帮我看一下有没有语法错误

Last summer,I went on a camp in the mountains with my classmates.At around 7 o'clock in the evening,we told ghost stories next to our tents.Suddenly,Wang Jingjing said,"Listen!I heard something unusual!"We stopped to listen but heard nothing."That's a UFO!"Gong Ying shouted.We looked up.A big bright thing soon landed near us.Two aliens got out of the UFO."What should we do?"Huang Yaxi asked."I'm afraid."Lan Chenxi said lowly.We all stood there with our eyes wide open.Then I didn't know what happened.We fell asleep.When we wake up,we were at school.
This story is my imagination.If it is similar to have,be sheer the coincidence.Thank you.

Answer 1

I went to a camp (camp 是名词，应该用went to）
we talked about ghost stories near to our tents。（ghost
story 是鬼故事，应该将鬼故事， 所以用 talked about）
that’s UFO 不是 a UFO。
we looked upward。
said with a low voice
near us： next to us 更好一些
got out： came out
i'm afraid： i'm scared 是我很害怕的意思，不应用afraid
widely open 语法 形容词
应该用woke up，要用过去时态
总的来说，不错！ 加油！！

Answer 2

有个小问题，said lowly不是表示小声的说，要用said with a low voice

还有，应该用woke up，要用过去时态。

Answer 3

Last summer,I went on a camp to the mountains with my classmates.we were telling ghost stories next to our tents at around 7 o'clock in the evening.Suddenly,Wang Jingjing said,"Listen!I've heard something unusual!"We stopped to listen but heard nothing."That's a UFO!"Gong Ying shouted.We looked up.A big bright thing soon landed near us.Two aliens got out of the UFO."What should we do?"Huang Yaxi asked."I'm scared."Lan Chenxi said in a low voice.We all stood there with our eyes widely opened.Then we didn't know what happened.We all fell asleep.When we woke up,we were at school.
This story is just my imagination.it'll be coincidence if the same thing happened before. thank you

希望我的纠正对你有帮助。你没有很多的语法错误，但是有几个词用的不是很恰当哦。 呵呵 ；）

Answer 4

A big bright thing

应该是Bright big， 一般性形容词放前，表物质大小之类的更加贴近名词中心词

Answer 5

把said lowly改成said with a low voice 现代式改woke up过去式