Question

请帮我检查一下这段英文有没有错 谢谢

Hello, everyone. I am a junior. My personality is relatively slow and hot, I will be very restrained with unfamiliar people, and I can talk with familiar people. I have good logical thinking ability and strong acceptance ability. My major is fashion design. I love my major. My ideal is to be an excellent fashion designer. Specifically, I hope I can design more suitable and beautiful clothes for fat people in the future. In order to realize my ideal, I have made a short-term plan for three years and a long-term plan for six years. I intend to work hard to improve my professional accomplishment in school. After graduation, I will work for two years. When I have some practical experience, I will start preparing for the postgraduate entrance examination and spend three years after the entrance examination. By then, I will be able to better improve myself. That's all about my self-introduction.

Answer 1

开始几句太直接用中文字翻译成英文，老外不是这样说话。
Hello, everyone! My name is XXXXXXX. I am 18(年龄). I am a conservative person because of my personality. I may look like a bit cool to strangers. But after I get familiar with them, I will be enthusiastic and talkative. I have a strong logical mind and I can learn quickly.

Answer 2

写的挺好的。

Answer 3

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Answer 4

请补全问题，我是英语本科生，四级分数547，虽然分数一般，但是足以解决基本常见英语问题