Question

请英语高手帮我修改下我的自我介绍~~

请各位英语高手看下我的自我介绍，我觉得我句子和句子之间衔接的不是很好，表达的也不是很到位，所以希望大家帮我改改 越口语越好，希望改的完整点，流畅点 谢啦~！
Good morning my dear professors:
I am very glad to be here for your interview,first .let me introduce myself. My name is xx，23 years old，i was born here ,so xx is my hometown, we know which is a really beautiful city.I am studying in xxx university ,my undergraduate course will be finished in July，and now，I am trying my best for seize the opportunity to enter the XX university。

Second, I will be introduce 大学的学习生活（不会说） ，my major is law ，and i like my specialty very much 。Besides school hours ，i had practice in court during the past holiday 。 In my Internship , i could not only applied what i learned in classes, but also learned some more knowledge which i can’t get them in the books such as how to get along with others and to deal with things 。

So four years’ university education gives me a lot of things to learn,a lot of chances to try,and a lot of practices to improve myself.It teaches me not only what to study and how to think,but also to see the importance of practical ability .

In the university life,i have made many good friends.They help me improve my study , and often give me good example to follow.
So i hope i can continue to study. I think the postgraduate study can enrich my knowledge and make me competent in my furture job
Ok that’s all . Thank you for your attention
请各位英语高手看下我的自我介绍，我觉得我句子和句子之间衔接的不是很好，所以希望大家帮我改改 ，越口语越好，希望改的完整点，流畅点 谢啦~！

Answer 1

i was born here ,so xx is my hometown, we know which is a really beautiful city
这句话有问题....可以改成I was born in XX,and I have been living here for more than 20 years. You know(可以适当加一些类似这个的语气词，比如WELL啊，ACTUALLY啊，特别是在你停顿的时候)，it is a dynamic city.

I am studying in xxx university ,my undergraduate course will be finished in July
有点复杂啊....直接说I am a student of xxx university, and I will graduate in July.

and now，I am trying my best for seize the opportunity to enter the XX university。
改成Acutally, I try my best to seize the opportunity for further study in xx university.(貌似你是想考某大学的研究生吧...我猜测)

Second, I will be introduce 大学的学习生活（不会说） ，my major is law ，and i like my specialty very much 。
first都没有出来呐，哪来的second啊....改成：First, I would like to introduce my college life. I am major in law, and in fact, I am fond of my specialty.

Besides school hours ，i had practice in court during the past holiday 。
继续改....Well, I once did the practice in court during the last (summer/winter) holiday.
下面接着改啊~
In my Internship , i could not only make the most of my professional knowledge, but also absorb some noble experience,such as how to get along with others and how to deal with some tough problems。Of course, the greatest gain is how to demonstrate "team spirit".

第三段我整体改了哈~
There is indeed a heavy crop during my four-year college life, which provides a big stage for me to improve my comprehensive ability, ranging from the study to the daily life.

最后的关于make friends啊，前面有提到过了，这里就不要了，然后接着继续改~
In fact, I am eager to reach a new height. Therefore, I am determined to continue my study. I believe the postgraduate study can not only enlarge my knowledge but make me more competent in the future as well.
Ok, that's all. Thank you very much!
恩，基本上就是这样啦~~~~
我再重新把整篇发一遍。也许写的也不是特别好，但是我尽力啦~~
Good morning dear professors：
I am glad to attend the interview.Let me introduce myself.My name is _(中文名)___，and you can call me___(英文名)____。I was born in XX,and I have been living here for 23 years. You know，it is a beautiful and dynamic city.I study in xxx university, and I will graduate in July. Acutally, I try my best to seize the opportunity for further study in xx university.

First, I would like to introduce my college life. I am major in law, and in fact, I am fond of my specialty.Well, I once did the practice in court during the last (summer/winter) holiday.In my Internship , i could not only make the most of my professional knowledge, but also absorb some noble experience,such as how to get along with others and how to deal with some tough problems。Of course, the greatest gain is how to demonstrate "team spirit".

Well, there is indeed a heavy crop during my four-year college life, which provides a big stage for me to improve my comprehensive ability, ranging from the study to the daily life.

In fact, I am eager to reach a new height. Therefore, I am determined to continue my study. I believe the postgraduate study can not only enlarge my knowledge but make me more competent in the future as well.
Ok, that's all. Thank you very much!

Answer 2

i was born here ,so xx is my hometown, we know which is a really beautiful city
这句话有问题....可以改成I was born in XX,and I have been living here for more than 20 years. You know(可以适当加一些类似这个的语气词，比如WELL啊，ACTUALLY啊，特别是在你停顿的时候)，it is a dynamic city.

I am studying in xxx university ,my undergraduate course will be finished in July
有点复杂啊....直接说I am a student of xxx university, and I will graduate in July.

and now，I am trying my best for seize the opportunity to enter the XX university。
改成Acutally, I try my best to seize the opportunity for further study in xx university.(貌似你是想考某大学的研究生吧...我猜测)

Second, I will be introduce 大学的学习生活（不会说） ，my major is law ，and i like my specialty very much 。
first都没有出来呐，哪来的second啊....改成：First, I would like to introduce my college life. I am major in law, and in fact, I am fond of my specialty.

Besides school hours ，i had practice in court during the past holiday 。
继续改....Well, I once did the practice in court during the last (summer/winter) holiday.
下面接着改啊~
In my Internship , i could not only make the most of my professional knowledge, but also absorb some noble experience,such as how to get along with others and how to deal with some tough problems。Of course, the greatest gain is how to demonstrate "team spirit".

第三段我整体改了哈~
There is indeed a heavy crop during my four-year college life, which provides a big stage for me to improve my comprehensive ability, ranging from the study to the daily life.

最后的关于make friends啊，前面有提到过了，这里就不要了，然后接着继续改~
In fact, I am eager to reach a new height. Therefore, I am determined to continue my study. I believe the postgraduate study can not only enlarge my knowledge but make me more competent in the future as well.
Ok, that's all. Thank you very much!
恩，基本上就是这样啦~~~~
我再重新把整篇发一遍。也许写的也不是特别好，但是我尽力啦~~
Good morning dear professors：
I am glad to attend the interview.Let me introduce myself.My name is _(中文名)___，and you can call me___(英文名)____。I was born in XX,and I have been living here for 23 years. You know，it is a beautiful and dynamic city.I study in xxx university, and I will graduate in July. Acutally, I try my best to seize the opportunity for further study in xx university.

First, I would like to introduce my college life. I am major in law, and in fact, I am fond of my specialty.Well, I once did the practice in court during the last (summer/winter) holiday.In my Internship , i could not only make the most of my professional knowledge, but also absorb some noble experience,such as how to get along with others and how to deal with some tough problems。Of course, the greatest gain is how to demonstrate "team spirit".

Well, there is indeed a heavy crop during my four-year college life, which provides a big stage for me to improve my comprehensive ability, ranging from the study to the daily life.