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假设你是一名高中生，名叫李华。因为老师担心同学们浏览不健康的网站，学校关闭了电脑教室的上网功能，同

假设你是一名高中生，名叫李华。因为老师担心同学们浏览不健康的网站，学校关闭了电脑教室的上网功能，同学们感到很郁闷。请你给校长写一封建议信。内容包括：1. 无法上网给学生带来的不便；2. 网络的必要性（帮助解决学习难题、获取最新信息；）3. 就老师的担心发表你的看法。注意：1. 词数120左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 信的开头和结尾部分已经给出， 不计入总词数。Dear headmaster, I’m writing to request you to allow us to surf the Internet in the computer classroom.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Yours, Li Hua

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Dear headmaster, I’m writing to request you to allow us to surf the Internet in the computer classroom. Right now, we cannot use the computer in the computer classroom to get on line, which makes us very upset because we can’t search for the information we need or read news. As far as I am concerned, surfing the Internet can benefit us in many ways. First of all, we can search for answers to some problems that we come across in our studies. Second, it is necessary for us to learn about the latest news. More importantly, we are no longer children now, so we are able to control our behavior. I promise we won’t visit unhealthy websites. I do hope you can take my suggestion into consideration and make a final decision. Yours, Li Hua

试题分析：本文是书信类作文。请你给校长写一封建议信。反映学校关闭电脑教室的上网功能的事情。文章的要点也基本上都给出来了，但不是很具体，考生要把要点解释清楚，不能有遗漏。而且要拓展内容，不能太空泛，在写作的过程中，要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型，如强调句，倒装句等，让文章更上档次。同时在列举措施的时候要使用合适的连接词如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，让文章看起来很有条理，也很流畅。本篇文章在写作时不要啰嗦，力求简洁。 【亮点说明】所给范文语言简洁，应用了一些较好的词组和句子：As far as I am concerned,据我所知，search for寻找，come across遇到，take …into consideration把..考虑在内， we cannot use the computer in the computer classroom to get on line, which makes us very upset because we can’t search for the information we need or read news.这句话用了两个定语从句， surfing the Internet can benefit us in many ways. 这句话用动名词做主语，we can search for answers to some problems that we come across in our studies. 这句话也用了定语从句，it is necessary for us to learn about the latest news. 这句话用了it做形式主语， I do hope you can take my suggestion into consideration and make a final decision.这句话用了强调句。还有范文使用了First of all, Second, More importantly,这样的关联词使文章更加连贯。