Question

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题目:Some universities require students to take classes in many subjects. Other universities require students to specialize in one subject. Which is better?

When asked about students should take classes in many subjects or specialize in one subject, the majority people claim that college students should concentrate on one subject, while other people conceive that students should take class in various subjects. As far as I am concerned, I hold the opinion that we have to be a specialist in one subject.
Why should I agree with majoring in one subject? For one thing, among those important reasons, one should be emphasized first. We have to be good at one field if we want to survive in the society, which means that specializing in one subject is the basic thing for us to get a job. Our society needs talents who are the best in their field rather than those who know a little about many fields. A survey shows that nearly every company requires the person who is specialized in one thing. For example, the company wants talents who are the best in accounting or marketing but they won't employee those who know a little in both accounting and marketing. If we have solid knowledge about accounting, we can get the job. Otherwise, we will never find a position which belongs to us in the society.
For another, only can the specialists make our country more strong. In other word, our country requires talents in every field. We may cite an example which is very persuasive. Yuan Longpin, who invents a new kind of rice which can improve the produce a lot but he is not the specialist iin otherfields, got a big prize a few years ago. Our country has a large number of populations so the food has become a serious problem since many years ago. What is more important is that the problem caused by food affects the economic development. Yuan Longpin had solved the problem so that we can focus on the economic development. We can know that the talents are vital to the development of any country. Consequently, are there any reasons why we think the university students should take many courses?
Not only can concentrating on one subject provide us pronounced merits, but also can teaching various kind of knowledge bring us some positive points. For instance, our college students will be more considerate. Meanwhile, they also can enjoy the life for they have taken different kind of courses and know what the real life is.
From what has been discussed above, even though taking various courses can widen the students' horizon, I still maintain the idea that we should foster our college students to be a specialist in one field. With these talents, we can speed up our development and become a developed country.

Answer 1

有些大学要求学生上课，许多科目。其他大学要求学生专注于一个主体。这是更好？

当问及学生应采取班在许多学科或专业的一个问题，大多数人声称，大学生应集中于一个主体，而另一些人设想，应考虑学生在不同学科的课堂。至于我本人而言，我认为，我们必须在一个专门主题。
我为什么要同意主修一个问题？原因之一是，在这些重要的原因，应该强调的一个第一。我们必须善于在一个领域，如果我们想要在社会中生存，这意味着在一个专门主题，这是基本的东西，我们找到工作。
我们的社会需要的人才谁是最佳的领域，而不是谁知道一些关于许多领域。一项调查显示，几乎每一个公司需要的人谁是专门从事一件事。例如，该公司希望人才谁是最佳的会计或市场营销，但他们不会雇员谁知道那些点燃
tle在会计和市场营销。如果我们有坚实的知识，会计，我们可以得到这份工作。否则，我们将永远不会找到一个位置属于我们的社会。
另一方面，不仅可以使我们的专家，国家更强大。换句话说，我们国家需要的人才在各个领域。我们可以举一个例子是非常有说服力。袁隆姘，谁发明了一种新的水稻，可以提高生产很多，但他不是专业医院otherfields ，得到了球迷的奖几年前。
我国有大量的人口，使食品已成为一个严重的问题，因为很多年前。什么是更重要的是，所造成的问题影响到粮食的经济发展。袁隆姘已解决了这个问题，以使我们能够专注于经济发展。我们可以知道，人才是至关重要的发展，任何一个国家。因此，是否有任何理由，说明为什么我们认为，大学生应采取许多课程？
不仅可以集中于一个主题为我们提供突出的优点，而且还可以教各种知识给我们带来了一些积极点。举例来说，我们的大学生将更加周到。同时，他们还可以享受生活，他们采取了不同的课程，并知道什么是真正的生活。
从上面已经讨论过，即使采取各种课程可以拓宽学生的视野，我的想法仍然保持，我们应该培养我们的大学生是一个专家一个领域。有了这些人才，我们就可以加快我们的发展，并成为一个发达国家。 （你自己看下，问题很多，怎么给你改？ 说具体点 看半天没看半天也没看懂你的意思）

Answer 2

they also can enjoy the life for they have taken different kind of courses and know what the real life is.中的for是prep，后不能引导句子。
Not only can concentrating on one subject provide us pronounced merits, but also can teaching various kind of knowledge bring us some positive points句子语法结构不对。倒数第二段没说服力。最后祝你toefl考试成功 其实你要多加强语法，很多语法错误啊

Answer 3

我国有大量的人口，使食品已成为一个严重的问题，因为很多年前。什么是更重要的是，所造成的问题影响到粮食的经济发展。袁隆姘已解决了这个问题，以使我们能够专注于经济发展。我们可以知道，人才是至关重要的发展，任何一个国家。因此，是否有任何理由，说明为什么我们认为，大学生应采取许多课程

Answer 4

我觉得思想挺好的
我完全写不出来呢
加油哈

Answer 5

楼主写的挺好的，词汇储备也可以看出来很丰富，衔接词也挺合适的，还需要建议的话可以尝试一下批改网人工批改，可能会有帮助，希望楼主托福成功！