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跪求英语大佬请帮我将这个句子修改得更地道一些，万分感谢!！

Why can’t walrus find an ice floe? Because we’ve melted them all. Problems like thinning ice sheets, reducing water area, dying corals are appealing to people’s attention, including that giant deep-sea animals are increasingly forced to turn to the poles for survival.
是修改！不是翻译！不要用机器！

Answer 1

Why can’t walrus find an ice floe? Because we, human, have melted them all. Problems like reducing sea ice extent, coupled with dying corals, have caught people’s attention. Just like that giant deep-sea animals that are increasingly forced to ...

Answer 2

1.介词like肯定不能用在这，like是只是类似或像的意思，要换成about等，或不定式。
2.三个或以上的并列的时候，最后一个加and，前面分别用逗号。
3.逻辑主语不对。
等等

Answer 3

“because”改“for”，“problems”改“phenomena”，"appealing"改“catching”，“including”后面的“that”去掉。动名词结构不建议在写作中多用，会显得冗长而且单调，建议改名词形式，如：……of……，例如： reducing water area可改成the reduction of water area。
个人看法，仅供参考

Answer 4

为什么海象找不到浮冰？因为我们把它们都融化了。冰原变薄、水域面积减少、珊瑚濒临死亡等问题正引起人们的关注，以及大型深海动物生活的越来越多地被迫.

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......是改，不是翻译