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Topic:Universitiesshouldacceptequalnumbersofmaleandfemalestudentsineverysubject.Towha...
Topic:Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.To what extent do you agree of disagree?
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As for a female student, I agree universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject absoultely.
In the long past time for several centries, female had to suffered the unfair treatment in every field during their whole life. They couldn't walk on the street without a scarf cover their face, they couldn't have dinner with other family members at the same table, espically when guests come to visit. For changing these unfair roles, many female's rights soilder stood out and fight for women rights. Besides, those brave fighters, there were a lot of great women had showed their outstanding field to the whole world and had proved to male the truth female also can do the same thing as male do, they can do even better than men.
During a lot of relovutions, people fighted of women rights, they changed the situation women lived in. Women could walk on streets, could join the social party, could publish their books,of course they could go to universities and study with male students together.
Female student is not stupid or hard to understand something than male student, but there are still some universities use this to refuse female student to get further education.
Opporitely, female students have some advantages. Female always be careful, they can do better in some complicated study area. The most famous advantage of female students is they have a big heart which benefit and useful for a social worker, that also helps them to get a better understand in arts.
So that seems there is nothing can refuse female students have the rights like male students, universities accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject is naturlly.
And there is a funny but very meaningful sentence:"If female couldn't study well in every subject, how can they be a good mother to teach their children about these?" 展开
正文：
As for a female student, I agree universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject absoultely.
In the long past time for several centries, female had to suffered the unfair treatment in every field during their whole life. They couldn't walk on the street without a scarf cover their face, they couldn't have dinner with other family members at the same table, espically when guests come to visit. For changing these unfair roles, many female's rights soilder stood out and fight for women rights. Besides, those brave fighters, there were a lot of great women had showed their outstanding field to the whole world and had proved to male the truth female also can do the same thing as male do, they can do even better than men.
During a lot of relovutions, people fighted of women rights, they changed the situation women lived in. Women could walk on streets, could join the social party, could publish their books,of course they could go to universities and study with male students together.
Female student is not stupid or hard to understand something than male student, but there are still some universities use this to refuse female student to get further education.
Opporitely, female students have some advantages. Female always be careful, they can do better in some complicated study area. The most famous advantage of female students is they have a big heart which benefit and useful for a social worker, that also helps them to get a better understand in arts.
So that seems there is nothing can refuse female students have the rights like male students, universities accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject is naturlly.
And there is a funny but very meaningful sentence:"If female couldn't study well in every subject, how can they be a good mother to teach their children about these?" 展开
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语法错误较多。调理尚清晰，不过题目好像不是从男女地位的角度出题。
开头可作一两句讨论后再亮观点，最后最好有个小总结。
综合得分：5.5-6.0
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