Question

帮我看看这篇英语作文

看看有什么错误吗 就四级难度
Fashion Pursuit in Colleges
Nowadays,there is a trend which is a undeniable fact on the campus that, more and more students are pursuiting fashion.Wearing characteristic clothes is getting prevailing among the youth.Other fashional things such as hair-dyeing,rings are also can be seen.
Many people hold the points that pursuiting fashion does no harm to there young men.They do have the flexible choices on what they wear or how they behave.Pursuiting fashion can also be looked as a pioneering spirit which shows the energy and the open-mind thoughts of the youth.
But on the contrary,there are also some people have the opposite idea that,pursuiting fashion is wasting time.They think that the colleges students should put the study and courses on the top of their agenda.Studying hard is the only imperative for the student and pour efforts into these fashional things is meaningless and worthless.
As far as I concerned,it is meaningless to compete with other people for pursuiting fashion.But dressing yourself property is also necessary because it does make you charming.

Answer 1

1，students are pursuiting fashion，pursuit是名词，这个因该用动词pursuing的,一下有这问题的都应该改正
2，pour efforts into these fashional things is meaningless and worthless.中的pour 应该改成pouring较为合适
3，As far as I concerned 应该是As far as I am concerned 才对
总体而言，这篇文章写得还是很不错的，理由论据很充分，上面只是我看到的一点小瑕疵啦，还有提个建议第一短你可以写的有层次一定，加上一定的过渡词，譬如：firstly，what is more 等这样效果会更好
个人意见，仅供参考。希望你能满意，哈哈

Answer 2

自己改动一下就行了
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