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请帮我查找一下这段话中的语法错误并改正,谢谢大家的帮助,我急用

Robert Ferrars shows a lack of compunction similar to Lucy's, as he enjoys his undeserved good fortune at another's expense. He shows very little concern for Edward's situation, or for his means of making a living; in fact, he prefers to make fun of the idea of Edward as a pastor, and addresses the whole affair with flippancy. Insincerity is a theme rife in the book, as Robert, Lucy, John, and Fanny, among many others, freely traffic in it to hide their blatant lack of concern for anyone other than themselves.
The opening discussion of money and marriage immediately establishes the important role that ordinary economic concerns will play in Austen's novel. Unlike the authors of Gothic and sentimental novels fashionable in her day, Austen refuses to romanticize; she recognizes that material realities constrain love and marriage. Nonetheless, she allows some of this sentimentality to seep into the novel, and the tension between reasonable economic concerns and overly romantic dreaming will constitute an important theme in the novel.

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我只觉得第一句有点问题，应为lack of sense of compunction，但两个of连在一起又不太好，这样改。like lucy,Robert Ferrars does not possess much sense of compunction for he shows little concern for Edward's situation, or for his means of making a living; quite the contrary, he assumes the idea of Edward as a pastor ridiculous, and addresses the whole affair with flippancy. Insincerity is a dominant theme in the book, as Robert, Lucy, John, and Fanny, among many others, freely take shelter in it to hide their blatant lack of concern for anyone other than themselves.
The opening discussion of money and marriage immediately establishes the important role that ordinary economic concerns shall play in Austen's novel. Unlike authors of Gothic and sentimental novels fashionable in her day, Austen refuses to romanticize; she recognizes that material realities constrain love and marriage. Nonetheless, she allows some of this sentimentality to seep into her novel, and the tension between reasonable economic concerns and overly romantic dreaming constitute an important theme in the novel.
你已经写得非常好了。sense and sensibility 我当年也分析过