Question

请帮我修改一下雅思作文，谢谢大家了。

The graph below shows the consumption of beef ,chicken,lamb and fish in a European country between 1979 and 2004
First,is the largest consumption of beef. Thus,people prefer beef at the earliest.nearly 225 grams per person per week. The second is lamb and chicken , approximately 150 grams and 135 grams per person per week respectively. The last is fish, only 60 grams per person per week.
Still later, the different kinds of meat a dramatic shift. The consumption sharp decline of beef. Become go sour.There are 115 grams per person per week, than the chicken a rise from 194 to 2004 . The lamb as for beef, decline 100 grams, only 50 grams. And the fish are always a levelling out , even decline 20 grams.
Overall, to obtain information from the graph, the chicken becoming one of most popular meat.

Answer 1

我觉得问题很多……没有图所以没法帮你，但我写得话应该写的好一些……你这样5.5分水平吧。。

Answer 2

可以找朗阁的老师帮你

追问

能帮我修改一下吗？谢谢~跪拜

追答

朗阁一对一作文精批：http://www.longre.com/topic_2013/zt/ysnh_1015/zuowen.aspx