Question

帮我修改英语作文 （高二）

没走题 、 要点都写了的 、 这篇作文的得分是17 、 帮忙找找扣分扣在哪里、还有语法错误的地方 。

考题是要求描述电影2012的内容、并发表自己的看法。

Due to the constant destoryment of environment by hunman beings. Balance system of the earth facing collapse . Human beings begin to luook for Noah's ark which can help them alive. Under the efforts of many different countuy all over the world, human beings save their life in the Noah's ark when the worldwide disaster is happening,gain the hope of live an develop.
Though it just is a film , but if we don't protect the environment from now,the film maybe come ture one day.So we should protect the environment,reduce the use of resources ,make our earth more beautiful.

Answer 1

Due to the constant destoryment of environment by hunman beings. Balance system of the earth facing collapse .
此源戚句其实不能分为两句，因为due to是一个介词短语，所以前半句不能单独成句。balance是动词，形容中裤词应该是balanced;整句谓语is不能丢
改后：Due to the constant destoryment of environment by hunman beings, balanced system of the earth is facing collapse .

Human beings begin to luook for Noah's ark which can help them alive.
look书写有误
alive为表语，最好改为雹培陵keep on living

Under the efforts of many different countuy all over the world, human beings save their life in the Noah's ark when the worldwide disaster is happening,gain the hope of live an develop.
country拼写错误
而且应用复数cuntries
life 改为lives因为是多条人命
gain是取得的意思，在此处不是很恰当，用retrieve较好 live 改为living
an 改为and

Though it just is a film , but if we don't protect the environment from now,the film maybe come ture one day.

把is 和just位置调换，改为 it is just a film
though 和but不可以连用，出现though时后小句不可用but，这是固定搭配一定要记住
from now改为from now on

Answer 2

Due to the constant destoryment of environment by hunman beings.这一句没有谓语。 Balance system of the earth （IS） facing collapse . Human beings begin to luook （LOOK）for Noah'纳吵敏s ark which can help them alive. Under the efforts of many different countuy （用复数）all over the world, human beings save（TO SAVE） their life in the Noah'洞枝s ark when the worldwide disaster is happening（HAPPENED）,gain the hope of live an develop.

看不下去了，好多错的，按我的想法，最好重新写碰巧一篇

Answer 3

gain the hope of live an develop应该激缓是睁迅development吧
it just is a film 应该是it is just
human beings save their life 改为悉铅此lives
Balance system of the earth facing collapse 改为Balance system of the earth is facing collapse

Answer 4

Due to the constant damage of the environment by hunman beings, the balance of the earth is facing collapse . Human beings begin to look for Noah's ark which can save them. With the efforts of many countries all over the world, human beings save their life in the Noah's ark when the worldwide disaster happens and gain the hope of living and development.
Though it just is a film , if we don't protect the environment now, it maybe come true one day. So we should protect the environment, reduce the use of resources to make our earth more beautiful.
1.里面游衫有些语法，句式错睁枯误。
2.单词语句缺少亮点和变化，很平淡。悉磨洞