Question

求帮改英语作文,改出语法错误就好了,感谢

Maybe we often observe a peculiar phenomenon: more and more people will get marry after graduate rather than do other thing.It happens very frequently.Tomorrow maybe will happen on yourself.
I hold the view that the reason why this phenomenon will occur is very explicit.Some parents want their descendant will mature quickly and they should have responsibility to other people;some parents have a vast hope that having a grandchild is very significant affair to enlarge their family.
In my opinion , get marry is a serious affair in person's life. Having a happy marriage will decorate your life,however,if you have a unhappy marriage they will ruin your live and make everything go to dark.On the one hand ,marry earlier perhaps will save your time to struggle yourself to have a better life, because your beloved can take your half risks away.On the other hand ,marry earlier maybe is a doom,if you have a bad choice ,it will destroy your family ,your enterprise and your life.
Above all, regardless of getting marry earlier or not , you should have a serious thinking before you make choice.

Answer 1

第一句得改，，很中文腔

A peculiar phenomenon is very common in our daily life.

other thing改为other things
more and more people will get marry after graduate rather than do other thing.It happens very frequently.这句也有问题，
你就把It happens very frequently这句不要好了，，多余
Tomorrow maybe will happen on yourself不懂什么意思额

I hold the view that the reason why this phenomenon will occur is very explicit.这句有问题,语法，句法，
改为I think it is clear about why this phenomenon occurs
Some parents want their descendant will mature quickly and they should have responsibility to other people这里的they有歧义，是指小孩，还是家长

Some parents look forward to the maturity of their children and hope their children have responsibilities.

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呃 omorrow maybe will happen on yourself 我想表达的意思是 第二天可能回发生在你身上

I hold the view that the reason why this phenomenon will occur is very explicit. 之所以这个现象会发生原因是非常明确的

中文意思是这样 但是我不知道怎么表达 请问一下怎么改呢?

追答

你就可以这样说啊，，Maybe you will be the next。你可能就是下一个。
我再看看
我发现你的文章结构整体很奇怪，，差不多都有问题，完全下不了手啊，不知道你到底要说什么，没有逻辑，文章很混乱，，然后你写文章是用中文的角度去思考的，，这样完全不对，中文是型散神不散，英文不同，英文是很讲究结构的，好比句子之间连接都是有连接词的那样。。

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1. 越来越多的大学生一毕业就迈入婚姻殿堂
2. 产生这种现象的原因
3. 我的看法

啊 不会吧 T T我作文要悲剧了

追答

Nowadays,a peculiar phenomenon is very common in our daily life.More and more students would rather get married than do other things after graduation.So why?first of all,many students are under the pressure from their parents.Some parents look forward to the maturity of their children and hope their children have responsibilities.what's more,the urgent need in their mind is to have a grandchild.

In my opinion, marriage is so important that you need to think twice.We know that you can take a horse to the water,but you cann't make him drink.A happy marriage can decorate your life.On the contrary, a bad marrige can ruin your life. 后面的都重复了，我就不加进来了

As a consequence,If you want to get married, think before you do it.

Answer 2

1. get marry > get married

2. graduate > graduation/graduating

3. thing > things

4. Tomorrow... > Tomorrow it may happen on you

5. descendant > + s

6. will mature > get mature

7. to other > for other

8. get marry is a > getting married is a

9. in person's life > in a person's life

10. ruin your live > ruin your life

11. go to dark > go to the dark

12. maybe is a doom > may be a doom

13. regardless of getting marry > regarding the matter of getting married 

14. make choice > make a choice

可能还有些错误，只改了明显的

个人意见，仅供参考

Answer 3

would get married after graduation rather than do other things.

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请问为什么要用WOULD呢?

追答

would do...rather than do 固定句型, 也可以说would rather do...than do...