谁能帮我改下我的英语作文语法错误..非常谢谢了
Intheendofschoolyear,IhavebeenreadaverygoodbookcalledCityofEmber.Thiswassecondbooktha...
In the end of school year, I have been read a very good book called City of Ember. This was second book that I have been read that year and it was a very good book. There was a part of the book that I think it was very interesting and exciting. The Singing Day in the book was a very a part of climax in the story that was making me engrossed it, and it was my favorite part in the story. There was a cliffhanger In the Singing day that encouraged me to continue to end of book. When bad Mayor caught Lina that I thought Lina would die; although, it just a book that I was worrying about Lina when I read about this part and it was so stimulating and theatrical. I may feel my heart-throb is very quick that it was like a movie flashing in my mind. when Lina escaped from the mayor that the lights was went out, she came to the top, she burst through the door to the roof and ran out. Doon was standing the way to river and waiting for Lina. I could felt that how much Doon was worrying about Lina and his feeling.
Although it was a science fiction book but I thought that there was a part of story that smeller in our life. Lina and Doon were best friends, they had explored the back alleys and dimly lit edges of the city, but they began to grow apart because a little stupid thing that Lina laughed at Doon. I can remember when I was much younger that I had a best friend, we were always playing with each other, but one thing happened which that cause our friendship almost broke up. I cannot remember why I argued with him but must be a little thing, I could felt my heart beating difficult like a stone on my heart that caused I cannot breathe anymore. As time goes by we seemed become strangers which that I forgot his name.
I thought the author very good at detail that there were many turning points made the story more interesting and thrilling. Those turning points were decisions that Lina and Doon made, and I thought those turning points worked very well. However, author still left some doubt points for readers. I thought those doubt points may tell readers in the sequel such as what happened before they migrate to underground city. I was very curious about what happen in the sequel, so that I had fantasy. They would find a new city that so difference between ember, and they would meet more people and solve more problems, also they would help more people. For guessing that they may get marry and have many children.
我的是过去式所以 呵呵 我写的很垃圾 所以难看懂 麻烦了 虽然就70分 我想我应该还有点 嗯 非常感谢
同时谢谢你的付出 哪怕你只是看了一眼
thx so much for everything! 展开
Although it was a science fiction book but I thought that there was a part of story that smeller in our life. Lina and Doon were best friends, they had explored the back alleys and dimly lit edges of the city, but they began to grow apart because a little stupid thing that Lina laughed at Doon. I can remember when I was much younger that I had a best friend, we were always playing with each other, but one thing happened which that cause our friendship almost broke up. I cannot remember why I argued with him but must be a little thing, I could felt my heart beating difficult like a stone on my heart that caused I cannot breathe anymore. As time goes by we seemed become strangers which that I forgot his name.
I thought the author very good at detail that there were many turning points made the story more interesting and thrilling. Those turning points were decisions that Lina and Doon made, and I thought those turning points worked very well. However, author still left some doubt points for readers. I thought those doubt points may tell readers in the sequel such as what happened before they migrate to underground city. I was very curious about what happen in the sequel, so that I had fantasy. They would find a new city that so difference between ember, and they would meet more people and solve more problems, also they would help more people. For guessing that they may get marry and have many children.
我的是过去式所以 呵呵 我写的很垃圾 所以难看懂 麻烦了 虽然就70分 我想我应该还有点 嗯 非常感谢
同时谢谢你的付出 哪怕你只是看了一眼
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In the end of school year, I have been read a very good book called City of Ember.这句话改成：I have read a good book named City of Ember at the end of school year.
This was second book that I have been read that year and it was a very good book.改成：This is the book I have read that year and it is helful for me.
There was a part of the book that I think it was very interesting and exciting.
改成：I think part of the book are very interesting and exciting.
The Singing Day in the book was a very a part of climax in the story that was making me engrossed it, and it was my favorite part in the story.
改成：I get lost in the article the Singing Day in the book, which is my favorite part in the story.
There was a cliffhanger In the Singing day that encouraged me to continue to end of book.改成：It is very wonderful that the Singing Day article encourage me to continue to read the book.
When bad Mayor caught Lina that I thought Lina would die; although, it just a book that I was worrying about Lina when I read about this part and it was so stimulating and theatrical.
改成：I am worry about Lina that she would be dangerous when I read this part that the bad Mayor catch up Lina.
I may feel my heart-throb is very quick that it was like a movie flashing in my mind. when Lina escaped from the mayor that the lights was went out, she came to the top, she burst through the door to the roof and ran out.
改成：I could feel that my heart-throb move very swiftly and it like a movie flashing in my mind. When Lina manage to escape from the mayor, the lights was throw out and then she come to the top and rush out the door to ran.
I could felt that how much Doon was worrying about Lina and his feeling.
改成：At this time, I can imagine that Doon is very concerned Lina.
Although it was a science fiction book but I thought that there was a part of story that smeller in our life.
改成：Although it is a science fiction book, I think that part of the book is related our realistic life.
Lina and Doon were best friends, they had explored the back alleys and dimly lit edges of the city, but they began to grow apart because a little stupid thing that Lina laughed at Doon.
改成：Lina and Doon are best friends that they have explored the alleys and the dim edges of the city. However, one thing happened that give rise to broke them up.
I can remember when I was much younger that I had a best friend, we were always playing with each other, but one thing happened which that cause our friendship almost broke up.改成：When I was a child, I still remember that I have one of best friends, the good relationship between us has been broken up by a little thing.
I cannot remember why I argued with him but must be a little thing, I could felt my heart beating difficult like a stone on my heart that caused I cannot breathe anymore.改成：I don’t remember the reason why we argue with each other. I feel that it should not hapeen this thing and I have any regret with this.
As time goes by we seemed become strangers which that I forgot his name.
改成：Time passed so rapidly and we don’t recongnise each other now.
I thought the author very good at detail that there were many turning points made the story more interesting and thrilling.改成：I think the author is so clever that he make the article more intresting and thrlling.
Those turning points were decisions that Lina and Doon made, and I thought those turning points worked very well.改成：It is very effective that the turning points made by Lina and Doon which make the article more attractive.
However, author still left some doubt points for readers. I thought those doubt points may tell readers in the sequel such as what happened before they migrate to underground city. I was very curious about what happen in the sequel, so that I had fantasy.
改成：There is no doubt that the reader has some questions on the article.I think the questions or doubts would make readers think of what has happended before they migrate to undergound city.
They would find a new city that so difference between ember, and they would meet more people and solve more problems, also they would help more people. 改成：They could find a new city that it is different from Ember and at the same time,they also could help others and solve more problems they met.
For guessing that they may get marry and have many children.
改成：Suppose I make a conclusion that they may get married and there are many children for them.
连接起来就是：
I have read a good book named City of Ember at the end of school year.This was the book I have read that year and it was helful for me. I think part of the book are very interesting and exciting. I get lost in the article the Singing Day in the book, which is my favorite part in the story. It is very wonderful that the Singing Day article encourage me to continue to read the book. I am worry about Lina that she would be dangerous when I read this part that the bad Mayor catch up Lina. I could feel that my heart-throb move very swiftly and it like a movie flashing in my mind. When Lina manage to escape from the mayor, the lights was throw out and then she come to the top and rush out the door to ran. At this time, I can imagine that Doon is very concerned Lina.
Although it is a science fiction book, I think that part of the book is related our realistic life.Lina and Doon are best friends that they have explored the alleys and the dim edges of the city. However, one thing happened that give rise to broke them up.When I was a child, I still remember that I have one of best friends, the good relationship between us has been broken up by a little thing. I don’t remember the reason why we argue with each other. I feel that it should not hapeen this thing and I have any regret with this. Time passed so rapidly and we don’t recongnise each other now.
I think the author is so clever that he make the article more intresting and thrlling.
It is very effective that the turning points made by Lina and Doon which make the article more attractive. However, author still left some doubt points for readers. ：There is no doubt that the reader has some questions on the article.I think the questions or doubts would make readers think of what has happended before they migrate to undergound city. They could find a new city that it is different from Ember and at the same time,they also could help others and solve more problems they met.Suppose I make a conclusion that they may get married and there are many children for them.
楼主，你的英语表达很混乱，看了半天才改了下来。你对从句还没有懂，还有现在完成时态没有完全弄懂。连接词和介词你也要多看。
希望对你有帮助。
祝你学习进步。
This was second book that I have been read that year and it was a very good book.改成：This is the book I have read that year and it is helful for me.
There was a part of the book that I think it was very interesting and exciting.
改成：I think part of the book are very interesting and exciting.
The Singing Day in the book was a very a part of climax in the story that was making me engrossed it, and it was my favorite part in the story.
改成：I get lost in the article the Singing Day in the book, which is my favorite part in the story.
There was a cliffhanger In the Singing day that encouraged me to continue to end of book.改成：It is very wonderful that the Singing Day article encourage me to continue to read the book.
When bad Mayor caught Lina that I thought Lina would die; although, it just a book that I was worrying about Lina when I read about this part and it was so stimulating and theatrical.
改成：I am worry about Lina that she would be dangerous when I read this part that the bad Mayor catch up Lina.
I may feel my heart-throb is very quick that it was like a movie flashing in my mind. when Lina escaped from the mayor that the lights was went out, she came to the top, she burst through the door to the roof and ran out.
改成：I could feel that my heart-throb move very swiftly and it like a movie flashing in my mind. When Lina manage to escape from the mayor, the lights was throw out and then she come to the top and rush out the door to ran.
I could felt that how much Doon was worrying about Lina and his feeling.
改成：At this time, I can imagine that Doon is very concerned Lina.
Although it was a science fiction book but I thought that there was a part of story that smeller in our life.
改成：Although it is a science fiction book, I think that part of the book is related our realistic life.
Lina and Doon were best friends, they had explored the back alleys and dimly lit edges of the city, but they began to grow apart because a little stupid thing that Lina laughed at Doon.
改成：Lina and Doon are best friends that they have explored the alleys and the dim edges of the city. However, one thing happened that give rise to broke them up.
I can remember when I was much younger that I had a best friend, we were always playing with each other, but one thing happened which that cause our friendship almost broke up.改成：When I was a child, I still remember that I have one of best friends, the good relationship between us has been broken up by a little thing.
I cannot remember why I argued with him but must be a little thing, I could felt my heart beating difficult like a stone on my heart that caused I cannot breathe anymore.改成：I don’t remember the reason why we argue with each other. I feel that it should not hapeen this thing and I have any regret with this.
As time goes by we seemed become strangers which that I forgot his name.
改成：Time passed so rapidly and we don’t recongnise each other now.
I thought the author very good at detail that there were many turning points made the story more interesting and thrilling.改成：I think the author is so clever that he make the article more intresting and thrlling.
Those turning points were decisions that Lina and Doon made, and I thought those turning points worked very well.改成：It is very effective that the turning points made by Lina and Doon which make the article more attractive.
However, author still left some doubt points for readers. I thought those doubt points may tell readers in the sequel such as what happened before they migrate to underground city. I was very curious about what happen in the sequel, so that I had fantasy.
改成：There is no doubt that the reader has some questions on the article.I think the questions or doubts would make readers think of what has happended before they migrate to undergound city.
They would find a new city that so difference between ember, and they would meet more people and solve more problems, also they would help more people. 改成：They could find a new city that it is different from Ember and at the same time,they also could help others and solve more problems they met.
For guessing that they may get marry and have many children.
改成：Suppose I make a conclusion that they may get married and there are many children for them.
连接起来就是：
I have read a good book named City of Ember at the end of school year.This was the book I have read that year and it was helful for me. I think part of the book are very interesting and exciting. I get lost in the article the Singing Day in the book, which is my favorite part in the story. It is very wonderful that the Singing Day article encourage me to continue to read the book. I am worry about Lina that she would be dangerous when I read this part that the bad Mayor catch up Lina. I could feel that my heart-throb move very swiftly and it like a movie flashing in my mind. When Lina manage to escape from the mayor, the lights was throw out and then she come to the top and rush out the door to ran. At this time, I can imagine that Doon is very concerned Lina.
Although it is a science fiction book, I think that part of the book is related our realistic life.Lina and Doon are best friends that they have explored the alleys and the dim edges of the city. However, one thing happened that give rise to broke them up.When I was a child, I still remember that I have one of best friends, the good relationship between us has been broken up by a little thing. I don’t remember the reason why we argue with each other. I feel that it should not hapeen this thing and I have any regret with this. Time passed so rapidly and we don’t recongnise each other now.
I think the author is so clever that he make the article more intresting and thrlling.
It is very effective that the turning points made by Lina and Doon which make the article more attractive. However, author still left some doubt points for readers. ：There is no doubt that the reader has some questions on the article.I think the questions or doubts would make readers think of what has happended before they migrate to undergound city. They could find a new city that it is different from Ember and at the same time,they also could help others and solve more problems they met.Suppose I make a conclusion that they may get married and there are many children for them.
楼主，你的英语表达很混乱，看了半天才改了下来。你对从句还没有懂，还有现在完成时态没有完全弄懂。连接词和介词你也要多看。
希望对你有帮助。
祝你学习进步。
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(In=>At) the end of school year, I have （去掉been） read a very good book called City of Ember. This was ^the second book that I have （去掉been） read that year and it was a very good book. There was a part （of=>in） the book that I think （去掉it） was very interesting and exciting. The Singing Day in the book was （a very=>very much） a part of climax in the story that was making me engrossed ^in it, and it was my favorite part in the story. There was a cliffhanger In the Singing day that encouraged me to continue to ^the end of ^the book. When bad Mayor caught Lina (去掉that) I thought Lina would die; although, it ^was just (a=>the) book (that=>where) I was worrying about Lina when I read about this part and it was so stimulating and theatrical. I may feel my heart-throb (is=>was) very quick that it was like a movie flashing in my mind. (when=>When) Lina escaped from the mayor (去掉that) the lights (去掉was) went out(,=>.) (she=>She) came to the top, (去掉she) burst through the door to the roof and ran out. Doon was standing ^on the (way=>road) to river and waiting for Lina. I could felt (去掉that) how much Doon was worrying about Lina and ^how his feeling ^was.
Although it was a science fiction ^, (去掉book but) I thought that there was a part of ^the story that (smelle in our lifer=>was similar to ours in the real life). Lina and Doon were best friends, they had explored the back alleys and dimly lit edges of the city, but they began to grow apart because ^of a little stupid thing that Lina laughed at Doon. I can remember when I was much younger (去掉that) I had a best friend(,=>.) (we=>We) were always playing with each other, but (one thing=something) happened （去掉which） that (cause our friendship almost broke up=>almost caused broken friendship between us). I cannot remember why I argued with him but (must be=>it must have been) a little thing(,=>.) I could felt my heart beating (difficult like a stone on my heart=> heavily like a rock) that (caused I cannot=>even made me unable to) breathe anymore. As time (goes=went) by we seemed ^to become strangers (去掉which) that I forgot his name.
I thought the author ^was very good at detail ^describing that there were many turning points (made=>making) the story more interesting and thrilling. Those turning points were decisions that Lina and Doon made, and I thought those turning points worked very well. However, author still left some (doubt points=>suspense) (for=>to) readers. I thought (those doubt points may tell=>it may be revealed to) readers in the sequel such as what happened before they (migrate=>migrated) to ^the underground city. I (was=am) very curious about what ^will happen in the sequel, (so that I had fantasy=>which means I am in fantasy). (They would find a new city that so difference between ember, and they would meet more people and solve more problems, also they would help more people=>Will they find a new city different from Ember, Will they meet more people and solve more problems, and also will they help more people?) (For guessing=>I'm guessing) that they may get (marry=>married) and have many children.
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Although it was a science fiction ^, (去掉book but) I thought that there was a part of ^the story that (smelle in our lifer=>was similar to ours in the real life). Lina and Doon were best friends, they had explored the back alleys and dimly lit edges of the city, but they began to grow apart because ^of a little stupid thing that Lina laughed at Doon. I can remember when I was much younger (去掉that) I had a best friend(,=>.) (we=>We) were always playing with each other, but (one thing=something) happened （去掉which） that (cause our friendship almost broke up=>almost caused broken friendship between us). I cannot remember why I argued with him but (must be=>it must have been) a little thing(,=>.) I could felt my heart beating (difficult like a stone on my heart=> heavily like a rock) that (caused I cannot=>even made me unable to) breathe anymore. As time (goes=went) by we seemed ^to become strangers (去掉which) that I forgot his name.
I thought the author ^was very good at detail ^describing that there were many turning points (made=>making) the story more interesting and thrilling. Those turning points were decisions that Lina and Doon made, and I thought those turning points worked very well. However, author still left some (doubt points=>suspense) (for=>to) readers. I thought (those doubt points may tell=>it may be revealed to) readers in the sequel such as what happened before they (migrate=>migrated) to ^the underground city. I (was=am) very curious about what ^will happen in the sequel, (so that I had fantasy=>which means I am in fantasy). (They would find a new city that so difference between ember, and they would meet more people and solve more problems, also they would help more people=>Will they find a new city different from Ember, Will they meet more people and solve more problems, and also will they help more people?) (For guessing=>I'm guessing) that they may get (marry=>married) and have many children.
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Although it was a science fiction book but I thought that there was a part of story that smeller in our life. 中"although"和"but"不能同时使用
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以下是我所发现的语法错误（仅仅指出了语法错误而已），有何问题互相交流交流哦
In （In改为At）the end of school year, I have been(been去掉——have been+doing现在完成进行时用于一直在做某事且可能继续做下去) read a very good book called City of Ember.
This was（加the） second book that I have been(have been 改为had——这里是过去的过去，用过去完成时) read that year and it was a very good book.
There was（改为is——介绍书中内容不必再用过去时态） a part of the book that I think it （it去掉——前面用了that定语从句，已经有了主语，无需再加it）was（改为is） very interesting and exciting.
The Singing Day in the book was（改为is） a very a part of(将very a part去掉) climax in the story that was making（改为makes） me engrossed （加个in——be engrossed in sth全神贯注于）it, and it was （改成is）my favorite part in the story.
There was a cliffhanger In the Singing day that encouraged me to continue to end of book. When bad Mayor caught Lina that （去掉that直接用逗号——用that代表从句，此句就不通了）I thought Lina would die; although, it （此处缺少谓语，应该加上is）just a book that(不需要用that，直接加逗号) I was worrying （改成worried——固定搭配，be worried about sth）about Lina when I read about （去掉about）this part and it was so stimulating and theatrical.
I may feel (改成felt that) my heart-throb is(改成was) very quick that it was like a movie flashing in my mind. when Lina escaped from the mayor that (直接用逗号)the lights was（灯熄灭用go out, go已经是动词，不需要be动词了） went out, （这里用句号）she came to the top,（两个完整的句子直接不能用逗号，你可以加连词and活着把后面的she去掉，直接用ing分词，也就是bursting） she burst through the door to the roof and ran out.
Doon was standing (加on)the way to（加the） river and waiting for Lina. I could felt （feel——could是情态动词，后面加动词原形）that how much Doon was worrying(worried) about Lina and his feeling.
Although it was a science fiction book but(前面有了although,后面就不能用but) I thought that there was a part of (加the)story that smeller in(was similar to和。。相似) our life. Lina and Doon were best friends, （加个连词and）they had explored the back alleys and dimly lit edges of the city, but they began to grow apart because (加个of)a little stupid thing that Lina laughed at Doon. I can remember when I was much younger（直接用young） that（用逗号） I had a best friend, （用句号）we were always playing with each other,（用句号） but one thing happened which that（which和 that二选一即可） cause our friendship almost broke up（cause to do）. I cannot remember why I argued with him(加逗号) but （加主语it）must be a little thing, I could felt(feel) my heart beating difficult(difficultly)(加which was ) like a stone on my heart that caused (去掉caused)I cannot（couldn’t） breathe anymore.
As time goes by we seemed become strangers which that (二选一) I（最好加个have,用现在完成时） forgot his name.
I thought the author （加was——be good at sth）very good at detail that there were many turning points made(making——turning points是主语，不需要用被动语态) the story more interesting and thrilling. Those turning points were decisions that Lina and Doon made, and I thought those turning points worked very well. However,（the） author still left some doubt(doubtful——doubt是动词，不能修饰名词) points for readers. I thought those doubt （doubtful）points may tell readers in the sequel such as what happened (改成would happen)before they migrate（migrated） to underground city. I was very curious about what (would) happen in the sequel, so that(so that 是指以至于的意思) I had fantasy. They would find a new city that so difference between （was so different from）ember, and they would meet more people and solve more problems,(and) also they would(also) help more people. For guessing(I guess) that they may get marry and have many children.
In （In改为At）the end of school year, I have been(been去掉——have been+doing现在完成进行时用于一直在做某事且可能继续做下去) read a very good book called City of Ember.
This was（加the） second book that I have been(have been 改为had——这里是过去的过去，用过去完成时) read that year and it was a very good book.
There was（改为is——介绍书中内容不必再用过去时态） a part of the book that I think it （it去掉——前面用了that定语从句，已经有了主语，无需再加it）was（改为is） very interesting and exciting.
The Singing Day in the book was（改为is） a very a part of(将very a part去掉) climax in the story that was making（改为makes） me engrossed （加个in——be engrossed in sth全神贯注于）it, and it was （改成is）my favorite part in the story.
There was a cliffhanger In the Singing day that encouraged me to continue to end of book. When bad Mayor caught Lina that （去掉that直接用逗号——用that代表从句，此句就不通了）I thought Lina would die; although, it （此处缺少谓语，应该加上is）just a book that(不需要用that，直接加逗号) I was worrying （改成worried——固定搭配，be worried about sth）about Lina when I read about （去掉about）this part and it was so stimulating and theatrical.
I may feel (改成felt that) my heart-throb is(改成was) very quick that it was like a movie flashing in my mind. when Lina escaped from the mayor that (直接用逗号)the lights was（灯熄灭用go out, go已经是动词，不需要be动词了） went out, （这里用句号）she came to the top,（两个完整的句子直接不能用逗号，你可以加连词and活着把后面的she去掉，直接用ing分词，也就是bursting） she burst through the door to the roof and ran out.
Doon was standing (加on)the way to（加the） river and waiting for Lina. I could felt （feel——could是情态动词，后面加动词原形）that how much Doon was worrying(worried) about Lina and his feeling.
Although it was a science fiction book but(前面有了although,后面就不能用but) I thought that there was a part of (加the)story that smeller in(was similar to和。。相似) our life. Lina and Doon were best friends, （加个连词and）they had explored the back alleys and dimly lit edges of the city, but they began to grow apart because (加个of)a little stupid thing that Lina laughed at Doon. I can remember when I was much younger（直接用young） that（用逗号） I had a best friend, （用句号）we were always playing with each other,（用句号） but one thing happened which that（which和 that二选一即可） cause our friendship almost broke up（cause to do）. I cannot remember why I argued with him(加逗号) but （加主语it）must be a little thing, I could felt(feel) my heart beating difficult(difficultly)(加which was ) like a stone on my heart that caused (去掉caused)I cannot（couldn’t） breathe anymore.
As time goes by we seemed become strangers which that (二选一) I（最好加个have,用现在完成时） forgot his name.
I thought the author （加was——be good at sth）very good at detail that there were many turning points made(making——turning points是主语，不需要用被动语态) the story more interesting and thrilling. Those turning points were decisions that Lina and Doon made, and I thought those turning points worked very well. However,（the） author still left some doubt(doubtful——doubt是动词，不能修饰名词) points for readers. I thought those doubt （doubtful）points may tell readers in the sequel such as what happened (改成would happen)before they migrate（migrated） to underground city. I was very curious about what (would) happen in the sequel, so that(so that 是指以至于的意思) I had fantasy. They would find a new city that so difference between （was so different from）ember, and they would meet more people and solve more problems,(and) also they would(also) help more people. For guessing(I guess) that they may get marry and have many children.
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第四行那里was making表达是被动了，但是make是无被动的。
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