Question

这句英文有没有语法错误，同时是不是能改得再文艺一点。before i dead, i just w

这句英文有没有语法错误，同时是不是能改得再文艺一点。before i dead, i just want to do something make people will truly feel sorry when the moment they know i was dead.

Answer 1

语法基本上没错,但是I是大写,不是小写

Answer 2

有语法错误

追问

有的话请帮助纠正一下，谢谢。

追答

建议重新想一下逻辑，重写一句。这句本身来说，第二个dead用的对，第一个不对。应是Before I die。 后面还几个错，want to do something to make... ， make somebody do something， when 后面的moment 得删了。

I just want to do something, before I die, to make people feel truly sorry when they hear about my death.

Answer 3

I just want to do something before anyone knows my death,exerting people truly sorrow for me as soon of they knew i passed away.