Question

请帮我改下英语作文

My Net Pal's name is Tony .He is a fifteen-year-old American.
He likes to play baseball but he can't play it well.He also likes action movies and ofen goes to see it ,and his favorite actor is LiXiaolong.Tony wants to go to China Beijing to see The Great Well.
On Septemember 11st——his birthday ,I sent a photo of Beijing to him.He felt very happy 。

Answer 1

My Net Pal's name is Tony who is an fifteen-year-old American boy.
He likes to play baseball though he can't play it well.He also likes to watch the action movies, and his favorite actor is Burce Lee.Tony wants to go to Beijing, China to see The Great Wall.
On Septemember 11th, his birthday ,I sent a photo of Beijing to him, and he felt very happy 。
改动了第一句，看电影最好用watch,而不是see. 李小龙的名字用英文应该是Bruce Lee. 中国北京应该写作Beijing, China,其他没有了。
如果你想写一篇地道一些的，我这个会比较好。

Answer 2

My Net Pal's name is Tony who is an American of fifteen-year-old.
He likes to play baseball though he can't play it well.He also likes to see the action movies, and the favorite actor of him is LiXiaolong.Tony wants to go to China Beijing to see The Great Wall.
On Septemember 11th, his birthday ,I sent a photo of Beijing to him, he felt very happy 。
做了一点小调整，希望对楼主有帮助~O(∩_∩)O~

Answer 3

ofen应该是often,

Answer 4

???楼主好像没放文啊？