我写了一篇英语作文,帮我修改一下好吗? 非常感谢

MyViewonFriendsRealfriendssharethesameidealsandinterests.Myfriendsareverykind.Wehelpe... My View on Friends
Real friends share the same ideals and interests. My friends are very kind. We help each other and advance together. If I make a mistake, my friend will not hesitate to point it out for me. We often play basketball outside. My friend is good at English, but I am poor in it. When I had difficulties, my friend can help me. So my English had improved a lot. I think keep friendship is very necessary. I like my friends.
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修改如下:(删去括号内的内容即是修改好的全文)

Real friends share (the same 删掉,既然share,说明不一样,分享)ideals and interests. My friends are very kind. We help each other and make progress (advance 删掉,不好)together. If I make a mistake, they (my friend 重复) will not hesitate to point it out for me. We often play basketball together(outside 不必点明室外,没有意义). One of my friends (前面friends是复数,这里应点明是一个朋友)is good at English, but I am poor at (固定搭配,不用in)it. With her help, (When I had difficulties, my friend can help me. So 罗嗦,删去)my English has (had 不要,不用过去完成时)improved a lot. I think maintaining (keep 不好,而且作主语要用ing形式)friendship is very necessary. I like my friends.
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So my English had improved a lot.
是不是应该改成have improved a lot

I think keep friendship is very necessary
I think keeping friendship is very necessary.
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首句改为 Real friend have the same ideal and interest
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基本GOOD!

把后半部分的friend单数改成复数,与前文保持一致。

So my English had improved改成:So I improved my English a lot.

I think keep friendship is very necessary改成:I think its necessary to keep friendships.
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楼主的文章总的来说是没什么大问题,语法上也是对的,但是我觉得,句子和句子之间是不是用上些and,besides,so这样的连词或者连接性短语会比较好,显得文章比较有条理,不会像无数个句子堆在一起。呵呵,这是我的意见,请参考一下,希望能帮到你
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