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练习写英语作文...请各位老师们帮忙修改下语法...谢谢......

The power of Luck.
Luck, an abstract thing.It will make everything good.
If you got this ,you would succeed in everything you did.
But luck just like a bird ,you can't find it easily.

Einstein ever said : Genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent perspiration.
But there was a problem Einstein didn't find.
That was luck.
A lot of successful men will be successful in their businesses, families, and grades cuz they had good moments ,good situations ,and good friends.
All these good things were luck!
To catch luck is impossible.
If you feel it is stayed by your side. Don't use it to do some stupid thing likes gamble. To buy a lottery is enough for you.
Cuz you will become nothing soon.
I think the luck isn't too hard to get. Trying to make a good mood in all day and you would feel everything is so fine. With a good manner to everybody.
Everything you felt was difficult to do and just become a piece of cake now. Good mood is very important. If you think you aren't a lucky guy.
Trying to make efforts and trying to make kindnesses to everyone.
Guys , you know. I always hope I have a lucky goddess and she will always stay by my side.

Answer 1

The power of Luck.
Luck, an abstract thing， will make everything good. （一句话中不可无谓语，因此用同位语的形式合并这两句话。）
If it hit on you,you would succeed in everything you did. (LUCK不是每时每刻都有的)
But luck just like a bird ,you can't happen to meet it easily.

Einstein ever said : Genius is one percent in spiration and ninety-nine percent perspiration.
The key is perspiration.
In my point of view ,one with perspiration is lucky enough to find the solution to his own trouble.(不好意思，我和你对这句话的理解不一样，能灵感也是种幸运)

That was what luck do with one who get persistence in his soul.
A lot of successful men will be successful in their businesses, families, and grades cuz(??) they had good moments ,good situations ,and good friends.
All these good things were luck!(我也不赞同，运气是成功的因素之一但成功远不只如此，需要持续的运气)
To catch luck is possible. Opportunity is for those who is ready for it.
If you feel it stay by your side,catch it as quickly as you can.However, Don't use it to do such stupid thing as gamble. Buying a lottery is enough for you.(动名词才能作主语)
Cuz you will become nothing soon.
I think the luck isn't too hard to get. Trying to make a good mood in all day and you would feel everything is so fine with a good manner to everybody.
Everything you felt was difficult to do in the past just become a piece of cake now. Good mood is very important even you think you aren't a lucky guy, you can gain from it.
Try to make efforts and show kindnesses to everyone. (我把它改为祈使句，还有注意and的省略和动词的多样化)
Guys , you know. I always hope that I have a lucky goddess and she will always stay by my side. (hope的从句不省略that)

Answer 2

The power of Luck.
Luck, an abstract thing.It will make everything good.
If you got this ,you would succeed in everything you did.
But luck IS just like a bird ,you can't find it easily.

Einstein ONCE said : Genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent perspiration.
But there was a THING Einstein didn't find.
That was luck.
A lot of men WERE successful in their businesses, families, and grades cuz they had LUCKY moments AND situations AS WELL AS good friends.
IT WAS LUCK THAT BROUGHT ALL THESE TOGEGHER!
BUT IT IS FRUSTRATING THAT IT IS IMPOSSIBLE To catch luck.If you feel it stayS by your side, don't use it to do some stupid thing like gamble. To buy a lottery is enough for you.
OTHERWISE, you WOULD become nothing soon.
I think the luck isn't too hard to get. Try to make a good mood in all dayS, OR TO DO ANYTHING With a good manner to everybody,
and you would feel everything is so fine. Everything USED TO BE difficult to do just becomeS a piece of cake now. Good mood is very important. If you think you aren't a lucky guy, YOU SHOULD STILL
try to make efforts and BE kind to everyone.
Guys , you know. I always hope I have a lucky goddess and she will always stay by my side. I AM SURE I WILL GET ONE IF I AM BLESSED WITH LUCK.

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