英语作文修改 急~ (修改一下语法错误然后用词错误) 20
“……”Itisthesentencefrom<thealchemist>whichimpressedmemost.<Thealchemist>writtenbyPaul...
“……” It is the sentence from <the alchemist> which impressed me most.
<The alchemist> written by Paulo Coelho , a man from Rio de Janeiro . He experienced ups and downs at the young age , since he was a teenager , he has been treated as a Psychosis and tortured by others , as him gowning up , he has been sent to prison for against political dictatorship , till he almost 40 years old , destined for San Diego,and then he got some insight .
Because of the exciting experience of the writer, it is a miracle of the birth of this book. Not only let the reader feel the deep, but also give some useful advices to the people who into confusion.
The story is about a shepherd boy called Santiago, who dreamed that there has some treasure buried in this for encryption twice. He decided to find this treasure after some hesitation. Therefore, he sold the sheep , and struggled his way here for his dream , and in the way , sometimes curious things happened to him , and he also meet some interesting people , finally , by the conducted from an alchemist , he reached his destination and find the real treasure .
After reading, I considered a lot.
The book has mentioned destiny for several times. What does it mean? In my opinion, it means the goal and ideal. And how can we set a goal? And what can we do to complete the dream?
Santiago told us a great deal.
Everyone is Santiago, everyone has his destiny, in this story, in his father's permission. Santiago decided to be a shepherd instead of a priest. He left his hometown and wandered around. But during the trip , he has growth after pass each station , and also harvest a lot at the same time , learned some languages , made friends with different people, enjoy the vast desert and magnificent Egyptian pyramids , perhaps this is the real treasure for the boy .
But as for us, although we have beautiful dreams, we seldom catch them.Someone wants to be a chef, but when his parents said : If you want to be a cook,your wages are not enough to eat, so he decided to be a civil servant and give up his dream. And also maybe someone dream of being a soldier, but no one support him, so he only does a regular job.
However, each one of us is a unique, worthwhile individual, for our dream, if we try hard and unrequited, everyone eventually will get something.
Wish everyone can be loyal to your dreams, and find their real treasure.
At the end , a phrase for <the alchmist> :……
是一篇读后感 帮忙修改一下语法的错误 然后精简一下 润色一下。 要简单易背的。 谢谢~ 展开
<The alchemist> written by Paulo Coelho , a man from Rio de Janeiro . He experienced ups and downs at the young age , since he was a teenager , he has been treated as a Psychosis and tortured by others , as him gowning up , he has been sent to prison for against political dictatorship , till he almost 40 years old , destined for San Diego,and then he got some insight .
Because of the exciting experience of the writer, it is a miracle of the birth of this book. Not only let the reader feel the deep, but also give some useful advices to the people who into confusion.
The story is about a shepherd boy called Santiago, who dreamed that there has some treasure buried in this for encryption twice. He decided to find this treasure after some hesitation. Therefore, he sold the sheep , and struggled his way here for his dream , and in the way , sometimes curious things happened to him , and he also meet some interesting people , finally , by the conducted from an alchemist , he reached his destination and find the real treasure .
After reading, I considered a lot.
The book has mentioned destiny for several times. What does it mean? In my opinion, it means the goal and ideal. And how can we set a goal? And what can we do to complete the dream?
Santiago told us a great deal.
Everyone is Santiago, everyone has his destiny, in this story, in his father's permission. Santiago decided to be a shepherd instead of a priest. He left his hometown and wandered around. But during the trip , he has growth after pass each station , and also harvest a lot at the same time , learned some languages , made friends with different people, enjoy the vast desert and magnificent Egyptian pyramids , perhaps this is the real treasure for the boy .
But as for us, although we have beautiful dreams, we seldom catch them.Someone wants to be a chef, but when his parents said : If you want to be a cook,your wages are not enough to eat, so he decided to be a civil servant and give up his dream. And also maybe someone dream of being a soldier, but no one support him, so he only does a regular job.
However, each one of us is a unique, worthwhile individual, for our dream, if we try hard and unrequited, everyone eventually will get something.
Wish everyone can be loyal to your dreams, and find their real treasure.
At the end , a phrase for <the alchmist> :……
是一篇读后感 帮忙修改一下语法的错误 然后精简一下 润色一下。 要简单易背的。 谢谢~ 展开
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2.1
"-- " It is the sentence from < the alchemist > which impressed me most.
[句子错误] 本句语法不规范，请检查！
[学习提示] 易混词汇: affect, influence, impress 均含“影响”之意。
第3段
3.1
< The alchemist > written by Paulo Coelho , a man from Rio de Janeiro .
[标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格，请检查
[学习提示] 易混词汇: man, mankind, humanity 均有“人类”之意。
3.2
He experienced ups and downs at the young age , since he was a teenager , he has been treated as a Psychosis and tortured by others , as him gowning up , he has been sent to prison for against political dictatorship , till he almost 40 years old , destined for San Diego, and then he got some insight .
[标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格，请检查
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 experience...ups_and_downs 在教材中出现过 31次
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 get...insight 在教材中出现过 128 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: almost, nearly, about, approximately, around, roughly 均有“大约，差不多”之意。
[批改提示] 批改提示，注意politic与political的区别。
第4段
4.1
Because of the exciting experience of the writer, it is a miracle of the birth of this book.
[学习提示] 易混词汇: due to, owing to, because of, thanks to 均表示“由于”之意。
[批改提示] exciting的近义表达有breathtaking或stunning。
4.2
Not only let the reader feel the deep, but also give some useful advices to the people who into confusion.
[句子错误] 本句语法不规范，请检查！
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 give...advice 在教材中出现过 2684 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: advice, opinion, progposal, suggestion, recommendation, view 均含“意见，建议”之意。
[名词错误] 单复数错误，advice是不可数名词。
[批改提示] people表示“人，民族”。查看与person的区别。
第5段
5.1
The story is about a shepherd boy called Santiago, who dreamed that there has some treasure buried in this for encryption twice.
[学习提示] 易混词汇: novel, romance, fiction, story, fable, tale 均含“小说，故事”之意。
[词语错误] 用词不当，请检查there be句型的用法。
[搭配错误] 搭配不当，treasure have不规范，建议修改。
5.2
He decided to find this treasure after some hesitation.
[低频警示] this treasure after some hesitation 在语料库中无此用法，疑似中式英语
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 find...treasure 在教材中出现过 162 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: decide, determine, resolve, settle 都含“决定”之意。
[批改提示] find指一般生活中的发现。注意与discover区别。详情点击
5.3
Therefore, he sold the sheep , and struggled his way here for his dream , and in the way , sometimes curious things happened to him , and he also meet some interesting people , finally , by the conducted from an alchemist , he reached his destination and find the real treasure .
[标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格，请检查
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 sell...sheep 在教材中出现过 8 次
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 reach...destination 在教材中出现过 491 次
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 meet...people 在教材中出现过 2259 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: queer, odd, funny, crazy, curious, peculiar, strange, eccentric, quaint, singular 均含有“奇怪的，奇异的，新奇的”之意。
第6段
6.1
After reading, I considered a lot.
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 consider...lot 在教材中出现过 32 次
[批改提示] consider近义表达有think about/ reflect on/ ponder/ cogitate upon/ contemplate
第7段
7.1
The book has mentioned destiny for several times.
[低频警示] mention...destiny 在语料库中无此用法，疑似中式英语
[低频警示] destiny for several times 在语料库中无此用法，疑似中式英语
[学习提示] 易混词汇: destiny, fate, lot, doom, luck, fortune 均有“命运，运气”之意。
7.2
What does it mean?
[学习提示] 易混词汇: intend, mean 均有“想要，打算”之意。
7.3
In my opinion, it means the goal and ideal.
[学习提示] 易混词汇: aim, goal, purpose, end, target, object, objective 均有“目标，目的”之意。
7.4
And how can we set a goal?
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 set...goal 在教材中出现过 2209 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: lay, place, put, set 均有“放”之意。
[批改提示] 查看and用于句首的用法。
7.5
And what can we do to complete the dream?
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 complete...dream 在教材中出现过 28 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: complete, finish, end, close, conclude, terminate, accomplish 均含“结束，完成”之意。
[批改提示] 查看and用于句首的用法。
第8段
8.1
Santiago told us a great deal.
第9段
9.1
Everyone is Santiago, everyone has his destiny, in this story, in his father's permission.
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 have...destiny 在教材中出现过 101 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: Father, priest 均与宗教中的“神职人员”有关。
[句子错误] 句中不同单句之间需要添加连词。
9.2
Santiago decided to be a shepherd instead of a priest.
[学习提示] 易混词汇: Father, priest 均与宗教中的“神职人员”有关。
9.3
He left his hometown and wandered around.
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 leave...hometown 在教材中出现过 81 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: roam, stroll, wander, ramble 均有“徘徊，漫游”之意。
9.4
But during the trip , he has growth after pass each station , and also harvest a lot at the same time , learned some languages , made friends with different people, enjoy the vast desert and magnificent Egyptian pyramids , perhaps this is the real treasure for the boy .
[标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格，请检查
[低频警示] magnificent...pyramid 在语料库中无此用法，疑似中式英语
[低频警示] growth after pass 在语料库中无此用法，疑似中式英语
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 harvest...lot 在教材中出现过 8 次
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 have...station 在教材中出现过 555 次
第10段
10.1
But as for us, although we have beautiful dreams, we seldom catch them.
[句子错误] 本句语法不规范，请检查！
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 have...dream 在教材中出现过 2392 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: beautiful, fair, handsome, lovely, pretty, fine 均含“美丽的，漂亮的”之意。
[批改提示] but的近义表达有nonetheless或nevertheless。
10.2
Someone wants to be a chef, but when his parents said : If you want to be a cook, your wages are not enough to eat, so he decided to be a civil servant and give up his dream.
[句子错误] 本句语法不规范，请检查！
[学习提示] 易混词汇: earnings, allowance, income, salary, wage, pay, fee 都可表示“工资，收入”之意。
[批改提示] want的近义表达有intend，tend，lack，need。
10.3
And also maybe someone dream of being a soldier, but no one support him, so he only does a regular job.
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 do...job 在教材中出现过 130 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: profession, job, occupation, trade, vocation, career, work, employment 均含“职业”之意。
[批改提示] 查看and用于句首的用法。
第11段
11.1
However, each one of us is a unique, worthwhile individual, for our dream, if we try hard and unrequited, everyone eventually will get something.
[学习提示] 易混词汇: at last, at length, eventually, finally, in the end, lastly 均含有“最后，终于”之意。
第12段
12.1
Wish everyone can be loyal to your dreams, and find their real treasure.
[低频警示] loyal to your dreams 在语料库中无此用法，疑似中式英语
[学习提示] 易混词汇: faithful, loyal, constant, true 均含有“忠实的”之意。
[高分短语] be loyal to 意为：忠于，属于四六级经典高分短语。
[句子错误] 主语错误，建议检查本句的主语。
第13段
13.1
At the end , a phrase for < the alchmist > : --
[句子错误] 本句语法不规范，请检查！
[句子错误] 句子不完整
[拼写错误] alchmist 拼写错误，可替换选项为：alchemist, alchemists, alarmist
[标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格，请检查
[学习提示] 易混词汇: aim, goal, purpose, end, target, object, objective 均有“目标，目的”之意。
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2.1
"-- " It is the sentence from < the alchemist > which impressed me most.
[句子错误] 本句语法不规范，请检查！
[学习提示] 易混词汇: affect, influence, impress 均含“影响”之意。
第3段
3.1
< The alchemist > written by Paulo Coelho , a man from Rio de Janeiro .
[标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格，请检查
[学习提示] 易混词汇: man, mankind, humanity 均有“人类”之意。
3.2
He experienced ups and downs at the young age , since he was a teenager , he has been treated as a Psychosis and tortured by others , as him gowning up , he has been sent to prison for against political dictatorship , till he almost 40 years old , destined for San Diego, and then he got some insight .
[标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格，请检查
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 experience...ups_and_downs 在教材中出现过 31次
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 get...insight 在教材中出现过 128 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: almost, nearly, about, approximately, around, roughly 均有“大约，差不多”之意。
[批改提示] 批改提示，注意politic与political的区别。
第4段
4.1
Because of the exciting experience of the writer, it is a miracle of the birth of this book.
[学习提示] 易混词汇: due to, owing to, because of, thanks to 均表示“由于”之意。
[批改提示] exciting的近义表达有breathtaking或stunning。
4.2
Not only let the reader feel the deep, but also give some useful advices to the people who into confusion.
[句子错误] 本句语法不规范，请检查！
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 give...advice 在教材中出现过 2684 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: advice, opinion, progposal, suggestion, recommendation, view 均含“意见，建议”之意。
[名词错误] 单复数错误，advice是不可数名词。
[批改提示] people表示“人，民族”。查看与person的区别。
第5段
5.1
The story is about a shepherd boy called Santiago, who dreamed that there has some treasure buried in this for encryption twice.
[学习提示] 易混词汇: novel, romance, fiction, story, fable, tale 均含“小说，故事”之意。
[词语错误] 用词不当，请检查there be句型的用法。
[搭配错误] 搭配不当，treasure have不规范，建议修改。
5.2
He decided to find this treasure after some hesitation.
[低频警示] this treasure after some hesitation 在语料库中无此用法，疑似中式英语
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 find...treasure 在教材中出现过 162 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: decide, determine, resolve, settle 都含“决定”之意。
[批改提示] find指一般生活中的发现。注意与discover区别。详情点击
5.3
Therefore, he sold the sheep , and struggled his way here for his dream , and in the way , sometimes curious things happened to him , and he also meet some interesting people , finally , by the conducted from an alchemist , he reached his destination and find the real treasure .
[标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格，请检查
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 sell...sheep 在教材中出现过 8 次
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 reach...destination 在教材中出现过 491 次
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 meet...people 在教材中出现过 2259 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: queer, odd, funny, crazy, curious, peculiar, strange, eccentric, quaint, singular 均含有“奇怪的，奇异的，新奇的”之意。
第6段
6.1
After reading, I considered a lot.
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 consider...lot 在教材中出现过 32 次
[批改提示] consider近义表达有think about/ reflect on/ ponder/ cogitate upon/ contemplate
第7段
7.1
The book has mentioned destiny for several times.
[低频警示] mention...destiny 在语料库中无此用法，疑似中式英语
[低频警示] destiny for several times 在语料库中无此用法，疑似中式英语
[学习提示] 易混词汇: destiny, fate, lot, doom, luck, fortune 均有“命运，运气”之意。
7.2
What does it mean?
[学习提示] 易混词汇: intend, mean 均有“想要，打算”之意。
7.3
In my opinion, it means the goal and ideal.
[学习提示] 易混词汇: aim, goal, purpose, end, target, object, objective 均有“目标，目的”之意。
7.4
And how can we set a goal?
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 set...goal 在教材中出现过 2209 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: lay, place, put, set 均有“放”之意。
[批改提示] 查看and用于句首的用法。
7.5
And what can we do to complete the dream?
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 complete...dream 在教材中出现过 28 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: complete, finish, end, close, conclude, terminate, accomplish 均含“结束，完成”之意。
[批改提示] 查看and用于句首的用法。
第8段
8.1
Santiago told us a great deal.
第9段
9.1
Everyone is Santiago, everyone has his destiny, in this story, in his father's permission.
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 have...destiny 在教材中出现过 101 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: Father, priest 均与宗教中的“神职人员”有关。
[句子错误] 句中不同单句之间需要添加连词。
9.2
Santiago decided to be a shepherd instead of a priest.
[学习提示] 易混词汇: Father, priest 均与宗教中的“神职人员”有关。
9.3
He left his hometown and wandered around.
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 leave...hometown 在教材中出现过 81 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: roam, stroll, wander, ramble 均有“徘徊，漫游”之意。
9.4
But during the trip , he has growth after pass each station , and also harvest a lot at the same time , learned some languages , made friends with different people, enjoy the vast desert and magnificent Egyptian pyramids , perhaps this is the real treasure for the boy .
[标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格，请检查
[低频警示] magnificent...pyramid 在语料库中无此用法，疑似中式英语
[低频警示] growth after pass 在语料库中无此用法，疑似中式英语
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 harvest...lot 在教材中出现过 8 次
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 have...station 在教材中出现过 555 次
第10段
10.1
But as for us, although we have beautiful dreams, we seldom catch them.
[句子错误] 本句语法不规范，请检查！
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 have...dream 在教材中出现过 2392 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: beautiful, fair, handsome, lovely, pretty, fine 均含“美丽的，漂亮的”之意。
[批改提示] but的近义表达有nonetheless或nevertheless。
10.2
Someone wants to be a chef, but when his parents said : If you want to be a cook, your wages are not enough to eat, so he decided to be a civil servant and give up his dream.
[句子错误] 本句语法不规范，请检查！
[学习提示] 易混词汇: earnings, allowance, income, salary, wage, pay, fee 都可表示“工资，收入”之意。
[批改提示] want的近义表达有intend，tend，lack，need。
10.3
And also maybe someone dream of being a soldier, but no one support him, so he only does a regular job.
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 do...job 在教材中出现过 130 次
[学习提示] 易混词汇: profession, job, occupation, trade, vocation, career, work, employment 均含“职业”之意。
[批改提示] 查看and用于句首的用法。
第11段
11.1
However, each one of us is a unique, worthwhile individual, for our dream, if we try hard and unrequited, everyone eventually will get something.
[学习提示] 易混词汇: at last, at length, eventually, finally, in the end, lastly 均含有“最后，终于”之意。
第12段
12.1
Wish everyone can be loyal to your dreams, and find their real treasure.
[低频警示] loyal to your dreams 在语料库中无此用法，疑似中式英语
[学习提示] 易混词汇: faithful, loyal, constant, true 均含有“忠实的”之意。
[高分短语] be loyal to 意为：忠于，属于四六级经典高分短语。
[句子错误] 主语错误，建议检查本句的主语。
第13段
13.1
At the end , a phrase for < the alchmist > : --
[句子错误] 本句语法不规范，请检查！
[句子错误] 句子不完整
[拼写错误] alchmist 拼写错误，可替换选项为：alchemist, alchemists, alarmist
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划横线的是需修改的地方。。“<The alchemist> _is_written by Paulo Coelho”“He experienced _up_ and _down_ at the young age since he was a teenager , he has been _treating_ as a Psychosis and torturing by others , _when_ him _grown_ up , he has been sent to prison for against political dictatorship , till he almost 40 years old , destined for San Diego,and then he got some insight .”(我还有事，后面的就不看了，如果有遗漏的请见谅。。)
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下面的可以也帮忙看一下么~
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