Question

谁来给我批改一下英语作文？？急~~~~

Everybody knows,the social intercourse is very important in student’s life.Some people think that the social intercourse is a bad idea every day.The reasons as the following;
1.The social intercourse will waste of time for the students.
2.The social intercourse will hurt the study.
Some people think that the social intercourse is a good idea every day.The reasons as the following:
1. Joining social intercourse can contact with lots of people.
2. Joining social intercourse can know lots of knowledge.
3. Joining social intercourse can bring happy.
I think that the students can join social intercourse,but they must join in vacation.It can’t waste of student’s time,and the students will have a good time.
急~~~改得好追加~~~~

Answer 1

这个，你估计是个初中生吧。这篇作文呢，当然我不知你老师是怎么说的，反正一般来说写英语作文是非常讨厌把点这样一二三的列出来的，你得把这几点放在文章内容里面，连起来说。

然后具体说说：
1. 首先第一句 everybody knows 后面得加个that，或者把important改成importance of 句式。
2. Some people think...everday 这句话怎么那么变扭呢，那个everyday最好别加。
3. The reasons as following，这句话根本就不是个句子啊兄弟，这是短语= =
4. 你这理由列的我没看，我也没打算看，毕竟我说过了你这理由得放在内容里，不能单独列出来。
5. 结尾毫无逻辑，什么叫必需加入vacation？
6. It can't..., and the student...这一句，兄弟，你这前面主语是it，怎么后面又变成了students了？
7. 我很粗略的看了一下，要我打分这大概就不及格吧。有些东西细说了你也用不上，比如说标点符号使用的问题，还有各种语法搭配。
8. 瞄了一眼又看很多，我只能告诉你你列出来的理由大多数都有语法错误，并且很多都不是完整的句子。
9. 有问题你可以再问~不过我觉得你还是先好好改改吧= =

Answer 2

1. 首先第一句 everybody knows 后面得加个that，或者把important改成importance of 句式。
   2. Some people think...everday 这句话怎么那么变扭呢，那个everyday最好别加。
   3. The reasons as following，这句话根本就不是个句子啊兄弟，这是短语= =
   4. 你这理由列的我没看，我也没打算看，毕竟我说过了你这理由得放在内容里，不能单独列出来。
   5. 结尾毫无逻辑，什么叫必需加入vacation？
   6. It can't..., and the student...这一句，兄弟，你这前面主语是it，怎么后面又变成了students了？
   7. 我很粗略的看了一下，要我打分这大概就不及格吧。有些东西细说了你也用不上，比如说标点符号使用的问题，还有各种语法搭配。
   8. 瞄了一眼又看很多，我只能告诉你你列出来的理由大多数都有语法错误，并且很多都不是完整的句子。
   9. 有问题你可以再问~不过我觉得你还是先好好改改吧

   不过还行

Answer 3

Everybody knows【that】 the social intercourse is very important in 【students‘】 life.Some people 【believe（语言多变）】 that the social intercourse is 【a costum which will never receive the sanction of tradition】.The reasons 【are】 as follows;
1.The social intercourse【is】 waste of time for 【删the】 students.
2.The social intercourse【is unfavourable for】 the study.
Some people 【argue（语言多变）】 that the social intercourse 【do more good than harm】.The reasons 【are】 as follows:
1. Joining social intercourse can 【help students】contact with lots of people.
2. Joining social intercourse 【is helpful to acquiring knowledge】.
3. Joining social intercourse can bring 【happiness】.
I 【hold the view】 that students can join social intercourse,but they must join it on vacation.It can’t be waste of students' time,and the students will have a good time.

Answer 4

我改的这个语法肯定没有问题，但是句子表达可能不太优美、婉转：
As everybody known,the social intercourse is very important during student’s life.But some people think it is a bad idea every day.The following are the reasons:
1.The social intercourse will waste the time of the students.
2.Also the social intercourse will not be good to students.
Some people think that the social intercourse is a good idea every day.The following are the reasons:
1. Joining social intercourse can contact with lots of people.
2. Joining social intercourse can know lots of knowledge.
3. Joining social intercourse will bring happiness.
I think that the students can join social intercourse,but what's more important,they should join in vacation.It can’t waste the time of students,and the students will have a good time.

Answer 5

不As everybody known,the social intercourse is very important during student’s life.But some people think it is a bad idea every day.The following are the reasons:
1.The social intercourse will waste the time of the students.
2.Also the social intercourse will not be good to students.
Some people think that the social intercourse is a good idea every day.The following are the reasons:
1. Joining social intercourse can contact with lots of people.
2. Joining social intercourse can know lots of knowledge.
3. Joining social intercourse will bring happiness.
I think that the students can join social intercourse,but what's more important,they should join in vacation.It can’t waste the time of students,and the students will have a good time.