我写了一篇英语作文，若按中考18分评分的话，可以得几分？还有，帮我修改一下全文好吗？非常感谢你！
MyFamilyRulesAsweallknow,anationhasit'sruleandafamilyalsohasone.Inmyhome,Ihavealotofr...
My Family Rules
As we all know, a nation has it's rule and a family also has one. In my home, I have a lot of rules. For example, playing the piano everday, do the home work more than2 hours. So I get tired of the family rules. I want to tell my parents some suggestions. If you would like me to be a good boy, you needn't give me a lot of rules and I'll do myself. Because I'm growing up. 展开
As we all know, a nation has it's rule and a family also has one. In my home, I have a lot of rules. For example, playing the piano everday, do the home work more than2 hours. So I get tired of the family rules. I want to tell my parents some suggestions. If you would like me to be a good boy, you needn't give me a lot of rules and I'll do myself. Because I'm growing up. 展开
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我很认真的评哦，不过有点小打击
"playing the piano everday, do the home work more than2 hours"前后不一致
"扰型辩tell"和缓缺"suggestions"不能搭吧
“you needn't give me a lot of rules and I'll do myself."
“needn't”用“shouldn’t”比较好
“Because I'm growing up.”“grow up” 是个比较长的过程，用现在进行时不对。
另外，字数什么的，内租首容有没有缺不大清楚，书写规范等，要评分还应给出，分值和要求，以及题目。
现在扣分的话，【按我们老师的】，扣了有四五分吧。
"playing the piano everday, do the home work more than2 hours"前后不一致
"扰型辩tell"和缓缺"suggestions"不能搭吧
“you needn't give me a lot of rules and I'll do myself."
“needn't”用“shouldn’t”比较好
“Because I'm growing up.”“grow up” 是个比较长的过程，用现在进行时不对。
另外，字数什么的，内租首容有没有缺不大清楚，书写规范等，要评分还应给出，分值和要求，以及题目。
现在扣分的话，【按我们老师的】，扣了有四五分吧。
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