Question

评初三的英语作文，打分并将错误之处修改(满分10分） （先谢谢帮我改作文的人，我的作文水平很烂的）

题目：以My---------为题，描述心中最重要的人或最难忘的人
要求：要包含以下几点：Who is the person in your heart? Why is the person so important in your heart? What will you learn from the person in your heart?
字数：60~80之间
内容： My parents
My parents in my heart.
When I was a children,parents look afterme and give all they have to us.At the part of the happy time from our parents to make.They give us some useful ideasand always believe us.
We become mature grils or boys,but our parents are no longer young.We learned some knowladges from our parents.They make a huge influence for us.
we love our parents.We will give something back to our parents.

Answer 1

My parents are the person who in my heart
When we were children ,parents looked after us and gave all that they had for us . (At the part of the happy time from our parents to make)(这句真看不懂).They give us some useful ideas and believe us all the time .
Time flies ! We become matural grils or boys,but our parents are no longer young.We had learned much knowladges from our parents.They have a huge influence on us.
we shoud love our parents and give something back to them .

追问

‘At the part of the happy time from our parents to make’这一句是打算写‘父母给予了我一个快乐的童年’，帮我改改吧，谢谢呐~

Answer 2

第一句语法错。改为 My parents in my heart is the most important.
At the part of the happy time from our parents to make, 此句不通啊，看不懂
最重要的是，要求：谁是你心中最重要的人？ 题目是My parents 。
所以，你文中审题有误，文中怎么那么多WE？ 你该写的是你自己，写别人就偏题了！

追问

恩，知道了，谢谢给我指出来
‘At the part of the happy time from our parents to make’这一句是打算写‘父母给予了我一个快乐的童年’，请帮我改改吧，谢谢了哈

Answer 3

parents, my most important people,are live in my heart. Since I was born, parents start look after me and give all they have .Besides,they always give me some useful ideas and believe me.
At present,I am mature gril (boy) ,but our parents are no longer young.I Not only has I learned much knowladges and skill (技巧）from them,but also how to be a honest people. I love my parents.I will give something back to them. As we know,parents are for us forever.Therefore,we should be a people who respest parents .

Answer 4

When I was a children,parents looked after me and gave all they had to my sister and me.At the part of the happy time from our parents to make.They gave us some useful ideasand always believe us.
We become mature grils or boys,but our parents are no longer young.We learned some knowladges from our parents.They made a huge influence for us.
We love our parents.We will give something back to our parents.

Answer 5

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