Question

我要用英文自我介绍希望有高人能帮我改正改正...指点指点..

I'am Peter,the youngest between the two children in my family. I'am silent,I selldom to talk with other,but I like listioning what are they talking about. I'm helpful and patient. I always help my friend what can I do.(我的意思:只要我能帮我都会帮) They alwys play a trick on me. I just smile. I like watching movie as love story, funny and natural.I always thinking but I don't like it. I can not control my mind. I love free.My dream is buy a beautiful house in good place where have hill,lake and trees around it.

Answer 1

个人感觉你这个太别扭了，我给小改了一下,更口语化一点
I'am Peter.I am the younger one in my family. I'am silent boy. and comparing talking I would rather listioning to the others silently. I'm also a warm hearted boy, always try to help on my best. They alwys play a trick on me.(这句我没明白你是想说什么，是说你的朋友经常戏弄你，骗你吗。trick这个词基本上是个贬义词) but I just smile it away.
I like watching movies especially those with humour,love or natural.
And I always keep thinking, pondering and musing, and I cannot stop even sometimes I don't really like it. (这句话也没太看明白，是不是想说，我总是不停地思考，而且无法停止。)
I love to be free.(不要用楼上说的freedom，这个词太重了，看过“勇敢的心”和“爱国者”没，那才能叫freedom，举例来说，假如你是个爱尔兰共和军闹独立，那你的愿望才真能叫做freedom)
My dream is have(我个人感觉“拥有”要比“购买”显得不那么功利，要不喜欢可以自己改过来) a beautiful house surrounded by profect view,like on a hill by the lake with woods around.

Answer 2

1. I'am 有两种改法I am ，I'm（表示我是...）

2. the youngest between the two children in my family最高级是三者及以上，用比较级就可以，the younger one in my family(比较级就指两者，不用再强调两个孩子即可)

3.I selldom to talk with other，把to去掉 other改成others
I like listioning what are they talking about改为I like listening to what they talk about(listen to表示听，后面说话不用进行时态即可)

4.I always help my friend what can I do改为I always help my friends wherever I can 或I always help my friends as much as I can.

5.I like watching movie as love story, funny and natural可以改为I like watching movies on love ,fun and nature.

6.I always thinking but I don't like it改为I always think but I don't like it.

7.I love free改为 I love freedom（自由要用名词）

8.My dream is buy a beautiful house in good place where have hill,lake and trees around it 改为My dream is to buy a beautiful house in a good place where there is hills,lakes and trees around my house. （动词不能直接做表语，要用不定式。place可数名词所以需要不定冠词，后面的定语从句用have表示有不准确，故改为了there be句式）

希望对你有用。