Question

帮忙修改作文在线等！！！！！谢谢！！！！！！！！！

I have been to USA two times. First time I went to USA happened when I was thirteen. And this summer I went to USA again.
In 2006, I went to a high school in New York, we had 29 persons, and we played with some students who study in that high school. We stayed there 19 days, had lot of fun with American students.
We went to countryside, and we trained teamwork at there. Every morning we had two guys had to made breakfast for all students and teachers. And then, we divided into three groups to take wire-walking trained. First, we should climbed the peak, next we through it one by one. To be honest, it was very scared me, because I had acrophobia. But all students through it very quickly, so I had no way to escape. But after did that, I got brave a lot.
When we finished one day trained, we had four guys to cleaned kitchen and bathroom. Then we sat outside, played some interesting games or lie down on the grass, looked at the sky.
I remembered, one of the most exciting trained was climbed mountain. Because that mountain we climbed were not exploit by people. In the mountain, had some animals like snake, squirrel, and also had lot of insects.
On the half way, when I pass a rivulet, unfortunately, I bite by a snake, hit the target unfortunate grate fortunate that was a grass snake.
The seven days in countryside we learned lot of things about teamwork from students, teachers. And also we made lot of friends in New York. In my mind, that was a exciting and interesting experience I never had.
那个是希望能帮忙改进一下让它显得更好一点。谢谢！

Answer 1

翻译中文是这样吗？挺好的啊

我去过美国两次。我第一次去美国发生在我十三岁。今年夏天我去美国了。
2006年，我去了纽约的高中，我们有29人，而我们与一些学生谁在这方面发挥的高中学习。我们在那里呆19天，与美国学生有很多乐趣。
我们去了乡下，和我们在那里训练的团队精神。每天早上，我们有两个人不得不作出的所有学生和教师的早餐。然后，我们分成三组，采取线行走训练。首先，我们应该爬上山顶，通过它，我们一个接一个未来。说实话，这是非常害怕我，因为我有恐高症。但是这一切的学生很快，所以我没有办法逃脱。但在这样做了，我得到了很多勇敢。
当我们结束了一天的训练，我们有四个人来打扫厨房和浴室。然后，我们坐在外面，玩一些有趣的游戏或躺在望着天空的草，坠落。
我记得，最令人兴奋的训练是爬上山之一。因为我们爬上那座山的人没有利用。在山区，曾经像蛇，松鼠一些动物和昆虫也有很多。
在半路上，当我走过了一道，很可惜，我被蛇咬伤，不幸击中了目标，这是一个幸运篦草蛇。
在农村的七天，我们学到了由学生，教师团队合作的事情很多。同时我们在纽约的许多朋友。在我看来，这是一个令人兴奋和有趣的经历我从未有过。

Answer 2

at the age of 岁数 went to改成pay a visit to USA 楼下错误 time 表示次数是可以用s的 改好的
I have been to USA two times. First time I went to there at the age of 13. And this summer I paied a visit to USA again.
In 2006, I went to a high school which is consisted of 29 persons in New Yorkwe . We stayed there 19 days and everyone have a good time get together.
We went to countryside and trained teamwork at there. Every morning we had two guys to made breakfast for all students and teachers. And then, we are divided into three groups to take wire-walking trained. First, we should climb the peak, next we got through it one by one. To be honest, it was very scared to me, because I have the sense of acrophobia. But all students got through it very quickly that give me courage ， and after doing that, I got brave a lot.
When we finished one day training, four guys lived to clean the kitchen and bathroom. Then we went outside, played some interesting games or lie down on the grass, looked at the sky.
I remembered, one of the most exciting trained was climbed mountain. Because that mountain we climbed were not exploit by people. In the mountain, had some animals like snake, squirrel, and also had lot of insects.
On the half way, when I pass a rivulet, unfortunately, I bite by a snake, hit the target unfortunate grate fortunate that was a grass snake.
The seven days in countryside we learned lot of things about teamwork from students, teachers. And also we made lot of friends in New York. In my mind, that was a exciting and interesting experience I never had.

Answer 3

played some interesting games or lie down on the grass
中间的连词or 要改成 and

Answer 4

第一行 two times改为two time

Answer 5

When I was thirteen I went to the United States for the first time

We stayed there for 19 days

Every morning the two of us had to make breakfast for all students and teachers.

We should climb the mountain