Question

请教英语高手，帮忙检查一下我写的英语介绍有没有语法或者时态错误，回答的好再的加分。谢谢

Everyone heard li Yang crazy English
大家都听说过李阳疯狂英语吧
Yes, my name is called Yang。（我也不知道这句对不对)
是的,我的名字也叫李阳
I’m from DaLian,
我来自大连
.It's a beautiful city.Dalian is famous for seafood.
他是一个漂亮的城市,大连以海鲜而闻名
But to me seafood is very terrible（难吃不知道是不是terrible）
但是对于我来说海鲜非常难吃
My favorite food is chocolate and ice cream, so I was fat
,我最喜欢的食物是巧克力和冰激凌,所以我很胖
I am a carefree and easy-going fat girl
我是一个无忧无虑并且性格随和的胖女孩
.I have wide interests.For example,I like music, swimming,, reading and so on
我有广泛的兴趣,例如,我喜欢音乐,游泳,,读书,等等
Music can help you relax mood，
音乐可以帮助我放松心情
British TV merlin is my favorite movie hero magic, of course, are also very handsome(不知道是不是前面已经提到了hero，所以后面“主人公”自动缩略了）
英国电视梅林是我最喜欢的魔法电影,当然主人公也都很帅.
My dream is to get into the current accounting,
我目前的梦想是考上会计师
In order to realize me dream,I will study hard from now on.
为了实现我的梦想,我从今后将努力学习
I hope that you all like me
我希望大家喜欢我
This is me.
这就是我
Thank you for your listening
谢谢

我希望能再告诉我：游泳能帮助我发泄情绪，读书能让我平静心态

谢谢了，改的好的再加分

Answer 1

Yes, my name is called Yang。这句不对哈，把called去掉就好了！
But to me seafood is very terrible！“very”可是adj,“terrible”有名词之意，形容词的意思是
1. 可怕的，骇人的。
2. (口语)非常的，厉害的，极度的。
3. (口语)极坏的。
副词
(口语)非常，很，极。 The weather was terrible (＝terribly) hot. 天气热极了。
名词
(主 pl.)可怕的人[东西]。
-ness 名词
所以是对的哈！
My favorite food is chocolate and ice cream, so I was fat
,我最喜欢的食物是巧克力和冰激凌,所以我很胖
这句好像没有多大的因果关系哦！
I am a carefree and easy-going fat girl
感觉不太好，还是把那个easy-going 改为outgoing比较好看！
for example强调“举例”说明，而且一般只举同类人或物中的一个作为插入语，且用逗号隔开，可置于句首、句中或句末。所以I like music, swimming,, reading and so on
不对哦，这个是要求把例子全部写出来的哦，不可以用 and so on哦！

Answer 2

Everyone has heard of Li Yang Crazy English, right? 大家都听说过李阳疯狂英语吧
And I have the same name with him. 我的名字也叫李阳
I’m from Dalian. 我来自大连
It's a beautiful city and is famous for seafood. 他是一个漂亮的城市,大连以海鲜而闻名.
But to me seafood is very terrible. 但是对于我来说海鲜非常难吃
My favorite food is chocolate and ice cream, that’s why I’m fat. 我最喜欢的食物是巧克力和冰激凌,所以我很胖
I am a carefree and easy-going fat girl. 我是一个无忧无虑并且性格随和的胖女孩
I have a lot of interests. For example, I like music, swimming, reading and so on.
我有广泛的兴趣,例如,我喜欢音乐,游泳,读书,等等
Music makes me relaxed, swimming blows off my repressed emotion and reading makes me peaceful. 音乐可以帮助我放松心情,游泳能帮助我发泄情绪，读书能让我平静心态
“Merlin” in British TV is my favorite hero who is very handsome and attractive. 英国电视梅林是我最喜欢的魔法电影,当然主人公也都很帅.
My dream at present is to be an accountant. 我目前的梦想是考上会计师
I will study hard from now on to make my dream come true. 为了实现我的梦想,我从今后将努力学习
Hope you will like me. 希望大家喜欢我
That’s all. 就这样
Thank you for listening. 谢谢

Answer 3

没错误的，至于您的“游泳能帮助我发泄情绪，读书能让我平静心态”
翻译如下：
Swimming can help me out emotions, reading can make me calm attitude

Answer 4

第一句Everyone “has heard about” li Yang crazy English.……
It's a beautiful city “and” is famous for seafood.
terrible可以改成disgusting，表示感到恶心
My favorite food is chocolate and ice cream, so I “am” fat
Music can help you relax （mood去掉比较好）
British TV merlin is my favorite movie hero magic, of course, are also very handsome我看不懂你要表达什么
My “current” dream is to get into the accounting,current前移，你是不是用的google翻译……
In order to realize “my” dream,I will study hard from now on.
I hope you all like me（去掉that比较顺虽然语法没错）
Thanks for listening这样比较好

小改动的地方我打了引号 这样语法就没问题了。

Answer 5

Music can help you relax mood.这一句改为：Music can help me relax.注意人称的变换。relax本意就有放松心情之意。

My dream is to get into the current accounting,这一句改为：My dream is to become an accountant.

In order to realize me dream,I will study hard from now on. 改为：In order to realize my dream.

最后一句更好的说法是：Thanks for your attention.

游泳能帮助我发泄情绪，读书能让我平静心态

翻译：
Swimming can help me abreact(精神发泄），and reading helps me calm down.