Question

请帮我看看这篇英语作文有没有语法错误 谢谢

I love Travelling

I’m passionate about traveling.. When I was a child, my dad used to take me outside and that let me fall in love with travelling..
In the journey, I can not only enjoy visiting many wonderful scenery, but also can meet different people as well. We share our dream, story and experience. In this way, I can know more about the world. Also I make so many new friends during the journey.
What’s more, I can’t bear to stay at the same place, doing the same thing everyday. This kind of life makes me sick and bored. Only in the journey, can I feel life is great.
However, travelling is wonderful, but the end of a journey always makes me sad. Every time when I say goodbye to the friends who travel with me, I can’t stop to cry, because we have so many good time together and I don’t want to be apart.
Anyway, travel around the world is my dream. I won’t stop it!

Answer 1

that let me fall in love with travelling 改成 that made me fall in love with travelling
I can not only enjoy visiting many wonderful scenery 改成 I can not only enjoy visiting many wonderful sceneries.
Also I make so many new friends during the journey. 改成 Also I can make so many new friends during the journey. 这样时态上才较为统一。
However, travelling is wonderful, but the end of a journey always makes me sad. 改为 Travelling is wonderful, but the end of a journey always makes me sad. 即去掉However，因为它与but意思重复。
Every time when I say goodbye to the friends who travel with me, 改为 Every time when I say goodbye to the friends who travelled/have travelled with me, 时态不正确
I can’t stop to cry 改为 I can’t stop crying 意思是”禁不住落泪“
because we have so many good time together and I don’t want to be apart. 改为 because we have had so many good time together and we don’t want to be apart. 时态问题和人称问题。
travel around the world is my dream 改为 travelling around the world is my dream 主语从句

Answer 2

写得不错!
不知道是要用到什么层面的.

Answer 3

I’m passionate about traveling.. When I was a child, my dad used to take me outside,WHICH let me fall in love with travelling..
In the journey, I can not only enjoy visiting many wonderful scenery, but also can meet different people as well. We share our dreamS, storIES and experienceS. In thAT way, I HAVE KNOWN AND can know more about the world. Also I make so many new friends during MY journeyS.
What’s more, I can’t bear to stay at the same place, doing the same thing everyday. This kind of life makes me sick and bored. Only in the journey, can I feel life is great.
However, travelling is wonderful, but I ALWAYS FEEL SAD AT the end of a journey (always makes me sad 去掉括号里的）. Every time when I say goodbye to the friends WHO I MEET IN MY TRAVEL (who travel with me 去掉）, I can’t stop CRYING, because we have so many good time together and I don’t want to be apart.
Anyway, THE travel around the world is my dream. NOTHING WOULD STOP ME. OR I WOULD KEEP WALKING(I won’t stop it!]

大写是我给的建议，其实你写的很好，只是我感觉改动的地方更符合西方人的表达方式，不过每个人都有自己的写作风格和习惯，仅供参考。

Answer 4

潇湘风月的回答很专业！I can know more about the world改成 i get to know more about the world会更好些

Answer 5

第三行：
scenery前面用many修饰，应该用复数吧？
but also 后面的can去掉
第四行：
as well建议去掉
dreams, stories and experiences用复数
建议know换成learn
第五行：
Also建议用at the same time
第八行：
journey后面逗号去掉

I can’t stop to cry -》I can't stop crying

最后一行
travel around the world > traveling around the world

Answer 6

I can not only enjoy visiting many （改成a lot of, scenery不可数名词) wonderful scenery... share our dream(dreams), story (stories)...
Also I make so many....... ---- I also make so many .....
doing the same thing every----do the same thing every
can I feel life is great ---- I can feel life is great
I can’t stop to cry---I can’t stop crying...
we have so many good time together ---we have so much good time together
基本是这些，都是些简单的语法错误，平时多加注意就能避免的。
总体写的不错，加油！
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Answer 7

my dad used to take me outside and that let me fall in love with travelling..
这一句应该改为非限制定语从句：my dad used to take me outside ，which let me fall in love with travelling..
many wonderful scenery 改为 much wonderful views , scenery 是个不可数名词
but also can meet different people as well. ，这儿的can已经好无意义，需划掉；并不是与前面那个can 成对比，只是 not only,but also 后面接的词性才因对称， not only Dad ,but also mother ,接的是名词，也可以是动词、形容词
I can’t bear to stay at the same place, doing the same thing everyday，这儿的doing亦应该与stay成并列所以需用原型
many good time 错
这篇文章除了还有时态问题，安排的有些不合理，所以得不到高分（别介意），还得多练习；我的水平也不是很高，不能为你详细、清楚的查找。