Question

我写了我的第一篇英语日记，求谁帮我看看有什么错误,或者可以有更好的表达么

Wen.,May,4th Fine
I will keep a dairy from today on.I know there may be a difficulty to learn English well just as my Chinese,but I still want to have a try.Though there are many differences between English and Chinese,they are both languages,so these methods I study Chinese could be used in my English as well.And I blieve I'll do a good job.
I want to go to Peking University,and I know I'll manage to live my dream.
My first jounal is a little bit short,but it'll be more and more great,and so will my English.
我的英语作文是我最大的缺陷，所以我想写日记是最好的联系方法了吧，写的不太好，而且没什么内容，请帮忙看看，怎样表达更地道吧，谢谢。

Answer 1

Generally speaking, you have done a good job.
整体而言，你写的不错。
1. Wednesday, 星期三的简写是 Wed， 不是Wen;

2. I will keep a dairy from today on；改成 I will keep writing dairy day by day ; 加上动词write，强调从现在开始坚持写日记这个动作；时间副词换成 day by day,强调每天都写；

3. so these methods I study Chinese could be used in my English as well；改成 so these methods by which I study Chinese could be used in my English as well;加上by which， 修饰methods，方法跟我学习中文之间的关系，是通过这样的方法，所以要加上by which;

4. and I know I'll manage to live my dream. 这句话没错，用的地方很恰当。如果用and I know I can make it 会更好；make it, 能做成某事，很多场合都可以用这样一个简短的话。很地道的英文表达方法。实现梦想：make dream come true;

楼主的日记，现在单纯的是表达自己的一些感情或想法，这样的日记久了就很无趣。楼主可以适时的描述身边的人、事、物等，再加以自己的见解；会是一篇很不错的日记。
当然，这将是楼主今后宝贵的人生回忆。
Just do it; you will make it, I believe.

Answer 2

日期的表示，一般都是先写日期，然后写月， 4th，May
Fine是想说晴么？晴是sunny或者clear，另外多给你几个，多云cloudy，阴天overcast，小雨drizzle，大雨heavy rain，阵雨shower，雾fog，雪snow,冰雹hail.
写日记keep dairy ，不加冠词。可以用from now on, 或者from today。
I know it may be difficult to learn English as well as my Chinese
Although there are many differences
so these methods I use to study Chinese can be used in my English as well
go to只是表示去一趟，用在这里不太好。get into 好一些，或者用其他的表示方法，I want to be a student of Peking University
journal拼错了哦~
a little bit 没这么用的，要么a little, 要么a bit
great自己有比较级的，greater，不需要用more
能看出你是个初学者，语言虽然不地道，但是也还算表意清楚，也不错啦，多读些书，看看外国人是怎么写的，希望你能坚持，也祝你进步，能考上北大。

Answer 3

您的这篇英语作文的最大缺点就是，一看就看出是汉译英，其实要想写好英语作文，还得把自己的语感培养出来，学会用英语的思维思考问题，平时多读读英文的文章，看看英文电影之类的吧，要想实现你的理想，付出的努力绝对要比你能想象的多得多。

Answer 4

英语日记中 月 日 要放在星期的前面 ， 从今往后只能说“from now on”，没有“ from today on”这种说法。“I know there may be a difficulty to learn ”最好改成“I know it's difficult to learn”.

Answer 5

it may be difficult to learn English well just as learning my Chinese,
so those methods for learning Chinese could be used on my English study as well.
I want to be admitted to Peking University
and I think i can manage to realize my dream.
楼主写的是地道的Chinglish啊，注意加强英语语法的学习。