Question

帮我看下这个英语作文写的有没有问题？可以怎么修改?

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Your friend Li Ming has written to invited you to go to his hometown together with him and you are willing to accept his invitation.
　　Write a reply to Li Ming
　　1. to express your appreciation and acceptance of his invitation
　　2. to ask about his schedule for the trip
　　3. to ask about what necessary preparations you need to make.
　　You should write approximately 100 words. Do not sign your name at the end of your letter. Use "wang Lin" instead. You do not need to write the address.
下面是我写的：（请各位大侠帮我看看）
Dear Li Ming:
Thanks for you invited me to you hometown,I'm looking forward to go there since I had head all your hometown from yours, How long will you plan to go there?I hope we can stay one week,Most of the interesting things I want to try.Pls tell me the schedule for the trip as soon as you decided,what necessary goods we need to arrange before we go there?I'm no idea for this things,i plan to take some special local products for your family,any advices for me?I'm can't wait to go there,Hope to receive you letter!
yours wang Lin

Answer 1

Dream is sun.Dream is light.Dream is_______(写一个和前者适合的单词).
(Dream is the light and is the sun as well.如果你非得要排比句的话，那就：Dream is the candle;Dream is the lamp; Dream is the sun as well; because the lamp is brighter than the candle,and the sun is the brightest.)
When I was a little a girl.I had a dream.I think the dream is very wonderful.Can you guess it? Yes,I want to be a singer.
(i have had a wonderful dream that i will become a super singer one day since my childhood.Do you think so?)
When I was nine years old.I listened one of Rong zu'er's songs.Its name is "Hui Zhe Chi Bang De Nv Hai(请用英文翻译一下歌名，是挥着翅膀的女孩）"Since then,I have started learning to sing songs.
(A girl flies with her wing)
To learn to sing is very difficult.I spent a lot of time on it.I had a sorethroat soon.I had to eat so many medicine.But I'm not afraid(害怕，貌似写错了）of it.I still practied it hard.Because I belived if I practice hard,my dream will come ture(这里要用到“主将从先”这个语法，但我不会。i don't understand what you said.）.I always say"Come On" to myself.I also learned how to play the drums.It helps me a lot in music.
After two years,I did well in singing .I began to take part in the singsing games.I did my best and won second places.I felt so exciting that couldn't help crying.I thing my efforts were not in vain.Now, I want to sing a song to my efforts and everybody:
(挥着翅膀的女孩英文版，这个歌词我有，不用管这点。）
I can fly
I’m proud that I can fly
To give the best of mine
Till the end of the time

Believe me I can fly
I’m proud that I can fly
To give the best of mine
The heaven in the sky
前两句修改的在括号里，后面的直接在你的句子修改，你写得不错作为一个初二生。

Answer 2

looking forward to go 应在go后加ing固定短语，Most of 最好改为all of;I'm no idea 应该为I have no
I'm can't 应该为I can not不可加am;