Question

谁帮我看下这句英语的语法有没有错误。顺便翻译下，我怕自己写错了。

I don't want this love ends,But it fails to meet my expectation.So if it still turns bad.And we cannot hold on,I'll give it up.I don't know what I can do for you.就是这句。

Answer 1

你写的英语中国人一看都很容易明白你的意思，但是，你写的句子有的不符合英语语法结构,还要注意根据上下句的意思采用合理上的逻辑连接词或结构，以便保持英语的“说话习惯”表达方式。你的原文是： I don't want this love ends,But it fails to meet my expectation.So if it still turns bad.And we cannot hold on,I'll give it up.I don't know what I can do for you .
修改如下： I hope our love not to be ended because it fails to meet with my expectation. If the situation still turns so bad that both of us can not hold on to our love , ,I'll decide that I will give it up. Now I really do not know what I can do for you .

Answer 2

坦白说，你的这个英文我看明白了，也知道你要表达的意思，但你的表达太中式了，不是给外国人看的，希望这样说没有打击到你学习英语的积极性。
I don't want this love ends,But it fails to meet my expectation.So if it still turns bad.And we cannot hold on,I'll give it up.I don't know what I can do for you.
我并不想要这样的爱情结局，但它没有达到我的预期。因此，如果继续恶化下去，而且我们无法坚持下去，我会放弃的！我不知道自己能为你做什么。

我的翻译，仅供参考

我并不想要这样的爱情结局，但它没有达到我的预期。
I can't have thought of the love ending like this.Well, the ending failed to come up to my expectation.因此，如果继续恶化下去，而且我们无法坚持下去，我会放弃的！
So,I will give you up if the love turns worse and we're unable to persist.
我不知道自己能为你做什么。
I really donot know what I can do for you.

Answer 3

I don't want our love to end like this, because it fails to meet my expectations. So if it still turns bad. and we cannot go on,I'll give it uptotally .I don't know what I can do for you.
我不想我们的爱情就这样结束了，因为这不是我所希望的。如果仍然没有好转，我就彻底放弃。我不知道能为你做些什么。

Answer 4

我不想我们这段爱情就这样结束了，可事情结局没有达到我的期望。如果仍然没有好转，我们坚持不下去了，我就彻底放弃。我不知道还能为你做些什么。
I hope our love not to be ended because it fails to meet with my expectation，If the situation still turns so bad that both of us can not hold on to our love , ,I'll decide to give it up. Now I really do not know what else I can do for you .

Answer 5

帮您润色了一下：
I hate to see our love end, but it fails to meet my expectation. So if it keeps turning worse and we are unable to hold on, I'll have to give it up. I don't know what I can do for you.
我不愿意看到我们的爱情走到终点，但是这种爱并不是我想要的。如果还继续这样恶化，而我们却无法坚持的话，我只能放弃。我不知道自己能为你做点什么。