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题目:lwanttobeanenvironmentprotectorNowadays,Theenvironmentisworseandworse.Therearealot...
题目:l want to be an environment protectorNowadays,The environment is worse and worse.There are a lot of problem on the earth such as water pollution and air pollution.As a human who lives on the earth., l want to be an environment protector to protect the environment .l will use the cloth bags instead of plastic ones when l go shopping..If l see people who waste water and paper,l will prevent them form doing that.Let’s try our best to make the environment better.
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1. 你可以说 is worse than before, 这是表示一种状态,但如果你非要说 worse and worse, 这就是表示一种逐渐的过程,所以最好说 is getting worse and worse。
2. problem要用复数,这应该是笔误吧。
3. such as 前面最好用一个逗号
4. As a human who lives on the earth 的说法太奇怪了,为啥要“作为一个活在地球上的人”呢?难道以前不是人吗?这话说的太中国口味了,最好避免这样的中式说辞。你只要简单直接的说出你自己的想法就好,所以建议就说 personally。
5. environment protector 就是 the person who protect the environment 的意思,所以你这里太罗嗦了,可以把 to protect the environment 给删掉。
6. prevent...from... 不是form,这应该也是手误。语法上不错,但是prevent是“阻止某人做某事”的意思,往往有千方百计采取预防措施或设置障碍去阻止某人或某事的意思,个人感觉用在这里不是很合适,况且人家真要浪费了,你还能真去想方设法的出手阻止吗?还是用劝说不要做比较真实,合乎情理一点。
总体来讲,没有什么太大的语法错误,我稍微润饰和修改一下后,如下:
l want to be an environment protector. Nowadays, our environment is getting worse and worse.There are a lot of problems on the earth, such as water pollution and air pollution. Personally, l want to be an environment protector. l will use the cloth bags instead of the plastic ones when l go shopping. If l see people who waste water and paper, l will try to persuade them out of doing that. Let’s try our best to make our environment better.
2. problem要用复数,这应该是笔误吧。
3. such as 前面最好用一个逗号
4. As a human who lives on the earth 的说法太奇怪了,为啥要“作为一个活在地球上的人”呢?难道以前不是人吗?这话说的太中国口味了,最好避免这样的中式说辞。你只要简单直接的说出你自己的想法就好,所以建议就说 personally。
5. environment protector 就是 the person who protect the environment 的意思,所以你这里太罗嗦了,可以把 to protect the environment 给删掉。
6. prevent...from... 不是form,这应该也是手误。语法上不错,但是prevent是“阻止某人做某事”的意思,往往有千方百计采取预防措施或设置障碍去阻止某人或某事的意思,个人感觉用在这里不是很合适,况且人家真要浪费了,你还能真去想方设法的出手阻止吗?还是用劝说不要做比较真实,合乎情理一点。
总体来讲,没有什么太大的语法错误,我稍微润饰和修改一下后,如下:
l want to be an environment protector. Nowadays, our environment is getting worse and worse.There are a lot of problems on the earth, such as water pollution and air pollution. Personally, l want to be an environment protector. l will use the cloth bags instead of the plastic ones when l go shopping. If l see people who waste water and paper, l will try to persuade them out of doing that. Let’s try our best to make our environment better.
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a lot of problem改成a lot of problems
l want to be an environment protector to protect the environment 这句显得语义重复
l will use the cloth bags去掉the,泛指cloth bags,不需要定冠词,正如plastic ones没有定冠词
If l see people who waste water and paper改成see sb doing 结构,强调要阻止正在发生的事情与下文对应
l want to be an environment protector to protect the environment 这句显得语义重复
l will use the cloth bags去掉the,泛指cloth bags,不需要定冠词,正如plastic ones没有定冠词
If l see people who waste water and paper改成see sb doing 结构,强调要阻止正在发生的事情与下文对应
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