Question

高一英语改错

My friend Henry, with him I studied in the same class,
didn’t like studying at school. That’s because he couldn’t
go to high school. He had to return back to his hometown,
where his father wished him to learn to manage our small
shop. However, the young man was not interesting in it and
didn’t do as his father said. He spends a lot of time reading
and learned how to repair cars. Last month, I accepted an
e-mail from him inviting me take my vacation in his
hometown. I started off. Seeing that he was so successful,
I said, “ Henry, all road lead to Rome. You are great.”!

Answer 1

I studied in the same class with my friend Henry. He didn't like to study at school. It is because he can't go to high school. He had to go back to his hometown, where his father wished him to learn how to manage our small shop. However, the young man was not interested in it and didn't do what his father said. He spent a lot of time reading and learning how to repair cars. Last month, I received an e-mail from him inviting me to take vacation in his hometown. I start to see that he was so successful. I said to him, "Henry, all roads lead to rome, you are great!".

这个文章好难读.语法不通顺并且很没有逻辑性.我不知道是不是要重新写.要是我的话我会把这个文章重新写一遍.如果这是你需要的话,可以追问告诉我.

追问

麻烦亲写一遍吧

追答

我看其他人的答案,意思好像是每行挑一个错误出来.不过这文章写得糟糕极了.所以我就按你说的重新写了一遍:

My friend Henry's story proved that everyone can be successful in their own way.

I met Henry from school. We were in the same class together for couple years before he quited high school. His father told him to study management and hoped he can run a small shop. So he went back to his hometown. Unfortunately he has no interest in management at all. Therefore he disobeyed his father's will and spent tremendous amount of time reading and learning car reparation.
Last month, I got an e-mail from Henry inviting me to spend sometime at his house. I was stunned by his success and told him: " Henry, all roads lead to Rome, you are a raising star!".

如果是我的话,同样的故事我会这样来叙述.原文讲的很多是非常中式的英文,读起来非常别扭.

Answer 2

1. him改成whom
2. because改成why
3. 去掉back
4. our改成their/his
5. interesting改成interested
6. spends改成spent
7. accepted改成received
8. me和take中间加入to
9. 此行无错
10. road改成roads

Answer 3

1. him改成whom
2. because改成why
3. 去掉back
4. our改成his
5. interesting改成interested
6. spends改成spent
7. accepted改成received
8. me和take中间加入to
9. 此行无错
10. road改成roads

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